CONTEMPLATION (Tanka)

I wish I have done this before...

I once put your name
On a pedestal, adored
your beautiful heart
We took a different path
Now, I walk the road alone ...

Author's Note

tan·ka1
ˈtäNGkə/
noun
noun: tanka; plural noun: tanka; plural noun: tankas

- a Japanese poem consisting of five lines, the first and third of which have five syllables and the other seven, making 31 syllables in all and giving a complete picture of an event or mood.

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Reviews

[Antoñyo]

More meaning here than meets the eye can be taken from this piece::::
A simple and beautiful reflection, a memory...while also speaking of time, personal growth, and yet the sadness cannot be ignored.
By itself it stands alone...but could be added to later works too...who knows

Beautiful!

[Dhaye]

The complaints of a depressed heart...
Thank you for the kind words, A.

[don't know]

nice tanka i like japanese verse a few words to say a lot ive only ever written haikus.You conveyed the emotions well

[Dhaye]

Thanks, dk.

[NeiL ArandA]

Is beautiful. Pack in few lines .

[Dhaye]

Thanks to you. Tell me your final decision and don't leave without a word. I have to sleep now because it's 12 am here. Bye for now!

[Eddie Davis]

I like your Tanka,
A Poem type I knew not of,
I know something new,
I don't read poetry much,
I see the error of it

[Dhaye]

What error, Eddie?

[Eddie Davis]

The error of not reading more poetry. Your poem was flawless. Sorry, I was trying to be witty.

[Dhaye]

There's challenge in reading poetry... on how you look at it, through its structure or its meaning.
No need to say sorry, Eddie. It's I who don't get it. LOL