And that spark is slowly swallowed by the dark And like a dying ember Which flickered for a moment Becomes the glittering ash Without any streak of yesterday's fire.
I am but the wild flower Standing still Abandoned by the wind And the rain.
I have been watching it From the start Just here Where I stand And I know how that spark Blinded everyone But not me For I am wild...
Yeah .. A light/fire turned to ashes and just as same as that light one day the life'd be gone and convert into the peaceful air .. Very nice and a deep poem. I admired this poem. Thanks for writing this great poem.
This is an awesome piece Dhaye with a sudden twist of writing style and motif. From a docile and tamed Sampaguita Flower, you all of a sudden turned yourself into a Wild Orchid !
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Hay naku, Neil. I tried to hide by changing my pen name, but still you noticed it. Perhaps I am one .. read moreHay naku, Neil. I tried to hide by changing my pen name, but still you noticed it. Perhaps I am one of those "outspoken" persons here. Only in writing I can express myself and my emotions. Actually, I'm not a wild orchid. I will still stand to be a "Daisy"...not a rose or any orchid. At least in my writings, I have that courage.
Thank you for the honest review, Neil. You tend to be honest like me. That's good. No flattery, no exaggeration...
A wonderful poem...Thank you for sharing...:).................
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks for dropping by, Sami. I'm always grateful with your presence in my page.
11 Years Ago
My pleasure...Any time...:).............
Someone wrote a poem about you and I just reviewed . .. read moreMy pleasure...Any time...:).............
Someone wrote a poem about you and I just reviewed . I noticed you did not leave your review. Check the news feed...:)..............
11 Years Ago
Neil Arand A( his name)
11 Years Ago
There' nothing there. What's the title of his poem?
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I don't know. But check. He has your pic on one of them...:).............
11 Years Ago
Ah, "A Book With A Rare Smile"...I have a review on it. Thanks, Sami.
11 Years Ago
Wow. Good . I forgot to ask you to email him...:).............
Impressive poem, that can guide someone with darkness to the end of the tunnel so bright, a good metaphor.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Hehehe. Just prompted with the word "ember" and this poem came out. I don't even know something woul.. read moreHehehe. Just prompted with the word "ember" and this poem came out. I don't even know something would appear intriguing...or would be an impressive metaphor.
Thanks for the review, Sir.
"And I know how that light
Blinded everyone
But not me
For I am wild..." perhaps, you could use that special knowledge to enlighten those blinded by that light. the mention of wind, rain and light is intriguing.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Susme, you have a review here, my dear Gab. Buti ka pa, you can always grasp even the "intriguing" p.. read moreSusme, you have a review here, my dear Gab. Buti ka pa, you can always grasp even the "intriguing" part of my poem. Hehehe. I'm glad you're here now.
light, wind and rain are powerful forces of the nature and in here you make it appear that all these.. read morelight, wind and rain are powerful forces of the nature and in here you make it appear that all these elements are against the voice, that makes it intriguing for me.
11 Years Ago
Sometimes, I unintentionally make an "intriguing piece" which only prompted by a word. You know my s.. read moreSometimes, I unintentionally make an "intriguing piece" which only prompted by a word. You know my style, Gab...if it's not my own or my friend's story, it can be 25% from what I have observed in other person (not my friend), 25% style/exaggeration, 25% from the memories left in my head (from books, movies), 25% originality of the piece (which is based on the inspiration like photo, word,etc). Actually, I remember the word "ember" in one of my Senryus, then this one came up. I included wind and rain in the poem so that the piece will be included in my collection "Echoes in the Rain". =)
Hello! I am Dhaye, a public secondary school teacher, a passionate artist "married" to her dream.
I write in different perspectives. So please know NOT all my works are about me.
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