You really got that fascination of the rain, dhaye. ^__^ in this piece, you perfectly presented different perspectives. the girl who think she needs to save someone from the rain and the mysterious man who showed her that there's beauty under the rain.
LOL. There's a twist in there. Actually, a person said to me that rain is good...so I believed in it.. read moreLOL. There's a twist in there. Actually, a person said to me that rain is good...so I believed in it. I made a different ending like in the short film I have watched (Thirst- the thirsty man cannot drink water because of depriving someone of his thirst. He was cursed, that he can only return into reality when somebody give him water. And so the story of curse repeat and repeat.) wherein that man in the rain is "cursed" and he can't stay out of it if nobody take his place under the rain...Then the girl, she is that saver...who is now waiting for someone who will take her out of the curse.
Hehe. Naghalu-halo na yan. My fascination about rain + concept of the short film. Patang ang dami kong gustong gawin kaso nagagalit na yung kasama ko sa school paper kasi di ko pa tapos and Sports Page. Di ko kasi type anf sports eh, no choice lang.
Thanks, Gab.
11 Years Ago
me mystery pa pala ang poem na ito. i was thinking that someone would likewise offer her an umbrella.. read moreme mystery pa pala ang poem na ito. i was thinking that someone would likewise offer her an umbrella that would lead to something sweet such as both of them dancing under the rain. hahaha..multi-tasking ka na naman. welcome dhaye.
11 Years Ago
Uy, another idea..."Dancing in the Rain"..nice title. Addict na yata ako sa rain ngayon, Gab. Dati p.. read moreUy, another idea..."Dancing in the Rain"..nice title. Addict na yata ako sa rain ngayon, Gab. Dati puro nega ang concept ko about rain, pero now...andami palang magagawa jan. Actually I'm making a book about rain + wind and moon, the title of the book is ECHOES IN THE RAIN. Haha! Thanks, Gab. Gagawan ko yan from the concept you have given. Yehey! Kailangan kong makabuo ng book na ibebenta ko sa mga mami-meet kong tao this December kasi...kaya excited ako gumawa. Kaso daming hassle...daming duties. Eh eto naman yung passion ko....kaso ang kinabubuhay ko sa teaching. No choice. Hehe.
Not only wonder who the girl is but also who is the man? Maybe a guardian angel. I like your poem and like you I also like rain.
Something calming about it - as is your poem.
i believe we all have multiple personalities and we all are multiple persons too.
a poet has a way to make them come alive and make sense among them.
once again, you took me.
thanks.
ps. second verse first sentence, last word should be in past tense(?) smiled?
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Ah, yes. Thank you for the correction...and for dropping by.
I agree with Gab, you must love the rain so much that it became your muse everytime you write...
There is beauty in the rain...
There is pain in the rain...
There is nourishes after the rain...
everything has its reason, the rain is just another reason
a saviour or a poison...
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
"a saviour or a poison."..I don't think so. Before, rain only gives me the feeling of depression and.. read more"a saviour or a poison."..I don't think so. Before, rain only gives me the feeling of depression and pain. But now, I have a different outlook about it. But in this piece, I made a twist in the end because I remember the short film I've watched.
I'm not too personal with my pieces now, Pax. Mostly are fiction. I haven't interviewed any person to have a different concept, so I watched short films and even movies lately. Basta, halu-halo yan. Hehe. Parang andami kong gustong gawin kaso budgeted ang time. LOL. Multi-tasking pa rin...Open lang to pero may ibang gawa. Hehe
Thanks, my friend.
11 Years Ago
it's just a hypothetical circumstances I see, its still needs to be proven but either way its a posi.. read moreit's just a hypothetical circumstances I see, its still needs to be proven but either way its a posibility... :) sabi mo nga..."only gives me the feeling of depression and pain" we all know depression is a start of a dark path, it depends on how you handle things diba... keep it up my friend... madami na tayong muti-tasking dito..hehe.. and your most welcome...
You really got that fascination of the rain, dhaye. ^__^ in this piece, you perfectly presented different perspectives. the girl who think she needs to save someone from the rain and the mysterious man who showed her that there's beauty under the rain.
LOL. There's a twist in there. Actually, a person said to me that rain is good...so I believed in it.. read moreLOL. There's a twist in there. Actually, a person said to me that rain is good...so I believed in it. I made a different ending like in the short film I have watched (Thirst- the thirsty man cannot drink water because of depriving someone of his thirst. He was cursed, that he can only return into reality when somebody give him water. And so the story of curse repeat and repeat.) wherein that man in the rain is "cursed" and he can't stay out of it if nobody take his place under the rain...Then the girl, she is that saver...who is now waiting for someone who will take her out of the curse.
Hehe. Naghalu-halo na yan. My fascination about rain + concept of the short film. Patang ang dami kong gustong gawin kaso nagagalit na yung kasama ko sa school paper kasi di ko pa tapos and Sports Page. Di ko kasi type anf sports eh, no choice lang.
Thanks, Gab.
11 Years Ago
me mystery pa pala ang poem na ito. i was thinking that someone would likewise offer her an umbrella.. read moreme mystery pa pala ang poem na ito. i was thinking that someone would likewise offer her an umbrella that would lead to something sweet such as both of them dancing under the rain. hahaha..multi-tasking ka na naman. welcome dhaye.
11 Years Ago
Uy, another idea..."Dancing in the Rain"..nice title. Addict na yata ako sa rain ngayon, Gab. Dati p.. read moreUy, another idea..."Dancing in the Rain"..nice title. Addict na yata ako sa rain ngayon, Gab. Dati puro nega ang concept ko about rain, pero now...andami palang magagawa jan. Actually I'm making a book about rain + wind and moon, the title of the book is ECHOES IN THE RAIN. Haha! Thanks, Gab. Gagawan ko yan from the concept you have given. Yehey! Kailangan kong makabuo ng book na ibebenta ko sa mga mami-meet kong tao this December kasi...kaya excited ako gumawa. Kaso daming hassle...daming duties. Eh eto naman yung passion ko....kaso ang kinabubuhay ko sa teaching. No choice. Hehe.
Hello! I am Dhaye, a public secondary school teacher, a passionate artist "married" to her dream.
I write in different perspectives. So please know NOT all my works are about me.
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