THE PERFECT DAY

pure fiction

Today is the perfect day, the finest day of my death
Holding a fine bouquet like this is the perfect wreath
Those eyes are watching me while I'm wearing this wedding dress
But the queen in their eyes, has these heart and mind in a mess.

I remember the last time that we talked to each other
When you gave me that call that I won't forget forever
I was trying to be strong but my eyes were full of tears
I tried to say these words though my heart was full of fears:

"My love, at this time, I won't ask so many things from you
You have done so much for me and you know it hurts me so
I can do nothing today but just to cry over you
You'll be alone and I'm here preparing to say "I do".

But I have a request my love, the  last favor I'll ask
Before the day of my wedding, please be there,please come so fast
Don't be late, be on time, I will wait for you 'til the last
When I give my vow to him, there won't be no time for us."

And now I am walking in this humble aisle of  my grave
I take the last glance at the door for a hope that I'll be saved
But no shadow of you there, now I have to face my death
I can hear my heart's mourning from the sound of the wedding bells.

Today is the perfect day, the finest day of my death
Holding a fine bouquet like this is the perfect wreath
As I have realized how fool I am, why I believed?
Today is the perfect day, let them watch my perfect death...

Author's Note

Reviews

[Pax]

The rhyme, Indeed is great… it’s irony – a perfect day for a bride to be – to wed in her death bed(metaphorically). I believed that love can make you feel alive, and when you vow to someone even though you love someone else – it’s a slow death to this person.

A very sad tale my friend…

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Pax, my bro and dear friend.

[N. Van Avery]

I'm the moderator of the "tales of death" contest. Very unique how you compared her wedding to death. Well done!

[Dhaye]

Thanks a lot for the kind words. Death comes in many ways. It's either any aspect of being human- physical, emotional, spiritual, or even mental.

[N. Van Avery]

Like I said in the contest description, there is no right or wrong way to view death. Thank you for your creativity!

[Sami Khalil]

This is a very unique poem for someone to look at their wedding date as a date of death metaphrically speaking. Amazing sad work...:)................

[Dhaye]

Thank you, Sami. :)

[Sami Khalil]

pleasure...:).............

[ayosonolowo]

nice poem, i will say, really i liked it. Keep up

[Dhaye]

Thanks. :)

[ayosonolowo]

welcome.......

[MsJewel]

Your words weave a sad, sad tale...to marry someone you don't love could definitely resemble death...

Your poem is thought provoking and intelligent and the rhyme and flow are superb. An exquisite piece of writing!
:) Julie

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Ms. J.

[Coyote Poetry]

You have create a masterpiece my writer friend. Artwork and words need to be put into a book. I would add your book to my collection. The poem left thoughts to ponder and question. Also create vision of life and death. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dhaye]

Thanks, CP.

[Lydia Shutter]

Monumentally sad....when a person marries someone they do not love....someone for whom they have no passion....the wedding day can be the day of death. The death of hopes and dreams and happiness. How sad....to be forced for whatever reason to spend a lifetime longing for someone else. Your words are powerful and the images gorgeous. Kudos to you. Lydi**

[Dhaye]

Thank you, Lyd.

[NeiL ArandA]

It is sad to belong to someone else
When the right one comes along .

So I lived my life in a dreamworld
For the rest of my days
Just you and me walkin hand in hand
In a wishful memory

Wish I had a time machine
I could make myself go back
Until the day I was born.

And I would live my life again
and rearrange it so that I'll be
Yours from now on.

Cuz it's sad to belong to someone else
When the right one comes along

[Dhaye]

Hey hey! Neil, this is a nice poem. Why not post it in your page so that it can be reviewed by others? It should not be stocked here as a plain review. What a coincidence! I was like you before. When I comment in a piece, as a new writer, my eagerness pushed me to state my reviews like this. I commend you for this one, Neil. Actually, my piece is a product of watching a movie of Judy Ann and Rico Yan but I made a twist in the end when the bride is already walking on the aisle. It's so common that the man comes along then saves the woman. LOL. My muse here is that contest about poems with rhyme but sad to say, I have entered this one about poems about death...since this also talks bout a different kind of death.
Thanks once again, Neil.

[Tom]

Marry for love and for nothing else is the message I take form this poem !

Very well poetically penned with an intriguing somber storyline, a splendid read on a Sunday afternoon, top write Dhaye!

[Dhaye]

Thanks for the visit, Tom.