Poem 20. BROKEN

I have this favorite cup, a simple one
Which is so dear  that I simply can't
Leave it in one corner of my chest
Considered it the last, the best
But one day I just found it there
Broken in pieces, drowned me in tears
Fix it, mend it, I really did
But it isn't me who could be that skilled
To make magic of fixing things
Somehow I realized what would it bring
Another cup with new design?
Perhaps I would know if I'll just try...

Author's Note

DanN's work is like an epidemic in my world...

Reviews

[The dark story]

when something is broken, those scars are left behind, the marks are quite visible. no matter how hard we try, we cab't bring it back to its sublime form as we do don't possess
:"magic of fixing things"...it symbolizes our relationship as well, there's always that knot when we try to join two broken relations together again.

nicely penned with a very wise diction usage. thanks for sharing.

[Dhaye]

Thanks for the insights, Atiba. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow I found this very symbolic for how when a relationship breaks you can try to mend it but it will never be the same.

[Dhaye]

Wow! Thank you for your interpretation. It could be, but my real take on it is as simple as being attached to something beautiful in my eyes and losing it...and deciding to change it with something more beautiful. Thank you for the visit, Cowboy.

[ayosonolowo]

Nicely penned, please keep it up....

[Dhaye]

Okay, thanks a lot.

[ayosonolowo]

You're Welcome

[Inspiring Writer]

Great write, it's a real feel you converted into words about something your love or did love. Words're powerful and realistic. Keep writing.

[Dhaye]

Thanks, IW. Glad you dropped by. :)

[ANTO]

The heart will break but broken live on - Lord Byron.

Opportunity out of disaster Dhaye. A poem that is seeped in life-lessons
Well done
X

[Dhaye]

Thank you so much, Anto.

[nicolo]

try to kill the "I" too much of it can really take its toll... it will sound dry... i know it's not easy to do so, but it makes a huge difference.

[Dhaye]

Wow! I think I have met here a person who could help me improve my works. Thank you for such honesty in your words. I will try to change it now, would you make a follow up if it improve or not?

[nicolo]

hahaha. geeez. that's my job.. I edit. ok, go on, but don't listen to whatever i say unless it agrees with your sense of reason.. it's still up to you... okay.. when i have time, i will. :)

[Dhaye]

Thanks, I just made few changes. If ever you have a suggestion (suggested lines), I'm willing to listen.

[nicolo]

sure. when i have time

[Dhaye]

Okay, thank you so much, Nicolo. :)

[nicolo]

i sent a link an example of killing the "I"

[Dhaye]

Yes, thank you so much. I remember an old Chinese proverb : "Give man a fish and he will for a day. Teach him how to fish and he will live forever." I think you have done the best here. I'm so grateful.

[Dhaye]

* "Give man a fish and he will live for a day..."

[Pax]

I know this feelings, it's hard to fix once something is broken...
and most of the time it will remain broken....
but that doesn't mean you can't buy new one
or create new ones, the new ones that is filled with the same love...

i for one considered myself a broken piece, but i never do show them..
perhaps only in my writes...
what i do is i kept on moving forward...
and always create new memories...
keep it up my friend...
you'll know best when you listen to yourself!

[Dhaye]

Thanks for the insight, Pax. I'll remember that.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I like the broken one... has stories to tell... sentimental ones... of course... the new one gives you perceptive to move on and realize things change...

[Dhaye]

Oh, thank you so much Glen. Glad you can relate with this one.

[Everett DeValle]

I love this poem a lot, and I see beauty in imperfection...it's the contemplation of this object and the emotional attachment to it...I truly enjoyed how you emote your feelings on this poem.

[Dhaye]

Thank you for dropping by, Everett. When you are used to something in your life, sometimes you didn't see that you are refraining yourself to welcome better things. But then with such realization, it is an exciting part to try, isn't it?

[Everett DeValle]

Very true...and I respect you provoke such thought and sentiment. Yes, it is exciting to try something new...moral of the story, don't get too attached. Wonderful job, Dhaye. :)

[Dhaye]

Oh, yes. You got it. Don't get too attached. Thank you.

[Everett DeValle]

You are very welcome, Dhaye.