Poem 17. YOU LEFT ME

A Tanka

I don’t understand

Why you left me all alone

Without a goodbye

Or even a simple sign.

Now you left me with a scar…

Author's Note

Reviews

[gabrielle]

I have this quote in mind when i read this piece:
"A man doesn't know how to say goodbye while a woman does not know when say goodbye."
While i am not really fond of looking for signs as i might interpret it, i believe that leaving someone is not done overnight. The same is product of long deliberation. Perhaps, we might not see it or most probably, we are in state of denial and we just could not accept such probability. It's strange that my comment is way longer than your poem dhaye. It's just my way of saying that this piece reminded me of those past goodbyes. Short but meaningful!

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Gab. I am fond of making Tankas... those short but meaningful poems.

[Neon]

Now this time it's a very painful words you penned in yer great Tanka .. beautiful work, you seemed a multi-talented writer .. you write loving pieces... you write sad pieces as well .. great work.

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Neon. A writer can express all of his/her emotions thru his/her pen...sad or happy feelings.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I've had my own shares of those unexplained and unexpected goodbyes, too. They're the worst farewells of all. The first four lines sound like a cliche to me but the last line speaks volumes. Good write! :x

[Dhaye]

Thank you, Blue. This is a Tanka (with 5-7-5-7-7 format ).

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I've never tried that before...Maybe one of these days. :) Thank you so much. :x

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Very good work. Pen On. Do u read mine 2 Time, why and Manner?

[Peter H]

very profound pain of abandonment it was capture clearly in the few lines that this poem had

[Dhaye]

Thanks for dropping by, Peter. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I just saw this write. It is great and sums up a whole relationship in few words...Bravo

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Sami. :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure ...:)

[Androglossia]

People come and go. Each follows a different road from yours. Roads normally cross that's why people find each other but then again, people go because they must. It's gonna be an endless cycle and you have to learn to live with it. This however is a great poem:)

[Dhaye]

Thank you :)

[Androglossia]

You're very welcome :D

[Pax]

sino naman kaya to... hmm.... may mystery person ka ata ha... LOL

[Dhaye]

Ah, sino pa kundi ang mga nawawalang tupa. Sad ang lola pag nawawala ang mga apo niya. Hehe. :)

[Pax]

di na kasi masyadong active yung mga apo mo noh... depress lng segoro...

[Dhaye]

Sinong depress? Ikaw? Si Marc, asan na? Si Maryanne, nawawala rin... Buti si Gab, every 9pm onwards andito yan...

[Pax]

Busy ata si Maryanne naka message ko siya kanina... si Marc busy rin... diba sabi niya... ako... medyo wala lang sa mood... yun lng...

[Androglossia]

Si Maryanne? Kahit nandito naman 'yan minsan parang wala rin, lol.

[Pax]

ang alin?

[Dhaye]

Joke lang, Manong. Lagi ngang wala kasi yan si Maryanne.

[Pax]

i see... nakita ko siya kanina... nandiyan lng yan... pero ngayon tulog yun...

[annabellee]

Short but yet moving. There's so much truth to this.
Great write :)

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Anabellee. :)

[annabellee]

You're most welcome :)

[Faceless Poet]

How sad! You'll never know the signs was already there you tend to not noticed!

-sky

[Dhaye]

???

[Faceless Poet]

:)