I just want to share this quote from my hidden casket in response to your second stanza :
" Create balance between reason and passion; learn how to express sentiments in full while preserving self dignity. Remember, too much is as dangerous as too little. " ~ Blackjaye
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow! The first time Ms. Blackjaye has ever visit my page. Thanks for the reminder, Ma'am. Don't worr.. read moreWow! The first time Ms. Blackjaye has ever visit my page. Thanks for the reminder, Ma'am. Don't worry, that will be my reminder everytime I express any idea. Balance....yes, that's important. Thank you so much. Your visit is highly appreciated...much with the meaningful quote you shared.
11 Years Ago
I remember myself captured by the thoughts you have for the teachers in your poem Teacher's Hands, s.. read moreI remember myself captured by the thoughts you have for the teachers in your poem Teacher's Hands, so this is not actually my first time to give review ( I think that is what you mean, since we often drop notes in each others profile page). Have a good afternoon, Dhaye.
11 Years Ago
Ah..yes. My God. I'm sorry, I forgot. What I mean is in giving a review... but still I made a mistak.. read moreAh..yes. My God. I'm sorry, I forgot. What I mean is in giving a review... but still I made a mistake. This is your second review, but we really often drop messages in each others profile page. Whew! Good afternoon, blackjaye.
Oh those perpetual questions will get you every time! This was very well written though. A lot of feeling went into this and if felt when you read it. Well done.
I think that this is really clever, the way you express isolation, melancholia, and how you describe responses between you and a significant other, It is great, the way you question matters is such a concise and convincing way, great writing here, I felt.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow! I truly appreciate your words, Sheema. Readers really have different taste when it comes to poe.. read moreWow! I truly appreciate your words, Sheema. Readers really have different taste when it comes to poetry. I am so glad that find this a great one.
Walking through a midlife crisis, with uncertainty within the world aside from the fact that you have a generous, trustworthy lover to hold your hand? Priceless. I find it quite odd that I look forward to this day, with nothing but (hopefully) a lover to guide my path.
I just want to share this quote from my hidden casket in response to your second stanza :
" Create balance between reason and passion; learn how to express sentiments in full while preserving self dignity. Remember, too much is as dangerous as too little. " ~ Blackjaye
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Wow! The first time Ms. Blackjaye has ever visit my page. Thanks for the reminder, Ma'am. Don't worr.. read moreWow! The first time Ms. Blackjaye has ever visit my page. Thanks for the reminder, Ma'am. Don't worry, that will be my reminder everytime I express any idea. Balance....yes, that's important. Thank you so much. Your visit is highly appreciated...much with the meaningful quote you shared.
11 Years Ago
I remember myself captured by the thoughts you have for the teachers in your poem Teacher's Hands, s.. read moreI remember myself captured by the thoughts you have for the teachers in your poem Teacher's Hands, so this is not actually my first time to give review ( I think that is what you mean, since we often drop notes in each others profile page). Have a good afternoon, Dhaye.
11 Years Ago
Ah..yes. My God. I'm sorry, I forgot. What I mean is in giving a review... but still I made a mistak.. read moreAh..yes. My God. I'm sorry, I forgot. What I mean is in giving a review... but still I made a mistake. This is your second review, but we really often drop messages in each others profile page. Whew! Good afternoon, blackjaye.
Nice poem, carried by great emotions in a dilemma .. but weak structure weakened the image
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks, Khaled. the dilema is gone. The answer is at the final stanza. As to structure, I'll let it .. read moreThanks, Khaled. the dilema is gone. The answer is at the final stanza. As to structure, I'll let it be because it's what I've got, unless you suggest the better one. Lol.
The subject you delved into has always been pressing to me, Dhaye. And I think you should go back to where you should be. We are here only for a lifetime and if we would cease to be ourselves, we never lived at all.
Very insightful, Dhaye. Keep it up.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Hi, Eye. I have already answered my question. Thank you for the suggestion. I go in a certain place .. read moreHi, Eye. I have already answered my question. Thank you for the suggestion. I go in a certain place because of my own personal reason, then I should live with that reason and not to be affected by any outside force. Lol.
Hello! I am Dhaye, a public secondary school teacher, a passionate artist "married" to her dream.
I write in different perspectives. So please know NOT all my works are about me.
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