Poem 19. GOOD NIGHT-MORN

Just a good night poem to everyone.. but only to see I have few seconds left before twelve...and finished it like another day has started.

My eyes seems heavier
My hands seems harder
My body need some rest
My mind needs to take a break.

The moonlight is inviting
The fresh air is now serving
My pillows are welcoming
My bed is now waiting.

How can I pretend I don't
While my eyes are almost close
And my hands are so tough
And my mind bring to a halt.

Good night, my dear, good night
For the time has come to a respite
Good night, at last, it comes
The resting time I always love.

But Oh, I think it's not
It's not Good night, it's not
Good morning now, good bye
Another day has come.

Author's Note

Just trying to leave a poem before I go to sleep late.

Reviews

[Healing Star]

When we are close to sleep on either side, going down or just waking, I have found creation is at its peak. I think it is because we are right there with our subconscious and our conscious is either letting go or has not gotten control as we are waking up. For me it is catching it in the morning, waking with an idea and hurrying to write it down before I lose it. I have been told to ask for things as we are just falling off things we want to bring about in our lives. Because our higher self will here it then and what he thinks about is what we will then do. It is because he is at higher frequency out in front of us in time, kind of our dreamer of what our world will be. That came from Ac Tah a Mayan from the Yucatan of Mexico. I think it is an amazing understanding that is one of the keys to how things really work.

[Sami Khalil]

The moonlight is inviting
The fresh air is now serving
My pillows are welcoming
My bed is now waiting.
My faves in this nice well written poem.

[Dhaye]

Thanks for the nice words, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome .

[Pax]

I used to sleep very late when i was still there in our home country... yes, I feel like I'm insomiac or something... or its just that i don't worry much of the tomorrow's ahead schedule for i was jobless at that times... and I write before i sleep, some poetry as such or any stories... that was before when i still have my own privacy and own space... and to think i only write before just to make myself sleepy... now its quite different... my sleep time has change and i don't write before i sleep anymore... for i have room mates and its very crowded... when i write i want peace i guess or just privacy...
ok, ok enough talk...lol
i like this poem for i can relate to its context on how you write it...
the rhyming is very nice...
keep writing kabayan!

[Dhaye]

Thanks, Pax. You always have those good words to say...sort of inspiration. Imagine, you regularly write now even in your situation that you lack privacy. Thanks.

[Pax]

i write because when i don't have much work in the office or i with my work... i write... and i have my own cubicle that is why i have some privacy more in the office than in the apartment... Good words ba, at inspiring pa... really? I'm just telling my story i guess... salamat ng marami... and your most welcome kabayan...

[Trigorin]

Nice piece, and you've managed to capture and convey that sort of drowsy feeling you were going for. The ending was very nice as well, but I somewhat question your use of 'OMG' - I feel like the piece would be enhanced a little by replacing that with some other exclamation or possibly just cutting it entirely. As it is, though, you've done well with this poem. Good work.

[Dhaye]

Sorry, that's Oh My God! expression. I made it short for I feel sleepy. But thanks to your constructive review. I'll try to enhance the line.