Oak Tree

Under the big oak tree,

they feel a cool summers breeze.

The man says I love you

& pulls out a ring.

 

She gasps,

bringing her white gloved hand to her face.

It's beautiful! She exclaims.

 

Her red lipstick stains cover his mouth.

That white dress will have to be thrown out now.

They lay in each other's arms,

bride & groom to be,

under the big oak tree.

Author's Note

Comments?

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Mr. Holly,

Thank you for the read request again. I do envy a bit how you can express what's on your mind. Expressiveness is key to a writer. I like willow tree versus oak trees, lol. Oh well. This has a nice flow to it, rhythm is good. Rhyme, again, helps the reader to focus better on the piece. "Under the big oak tree," is a good start for this piece as it does dive into the issue at hand. "She gasps, bringing her white gloved hand to her face. It's beautiful! She exclaims." How romantic, lol. I cannot do romantic/lovey-dovey stuff... most of my poems can be either cynical or dark. Thank you for the read request. Kudos... 8.5/10.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

[Comatose]

Wow...this is absolutely amazing. The way you made it so full of meaning and emotion with only a few lines is amazing. Well done. :)

[Huggy Bear]

This poem is very relaxing and puts me at peace:) I could feel the love:)

[deeps]

This is a wonderful and beuatiful write here.
I like this it flows well.

[Amber "Victoriomantic" ..]

Lovely poem. Short and sweet, which is often the best kind. Very romantic too, and definitely one that made me smile :] Your poetry is an art.

[Lucia]

Awww!!! So romantic, sounds like your really got down the main emotions here. Maybe I'm impartial, but I love really happy poems like this. a great write!

[Chloe Christine]

This is so cuute(: Very nice, as usual.

[Erin Lee]

like the senses u are starting to incorporate into your writing. the redlipstick was a great touch. what did it smell like? how did it FEEL to lay in his arms? love the line about the white dress - esp since a bridal gown is traditionally white! nice job hollywood!

[there is no more from m..]

i really enjoyed this poem :)

[r]

i like... thats all that i can say