Re-evolution

Focus on the fish.
The little creatures so contented with simplicity.
Eating, not yet eaten, they do not question once, their fate.
Only search out each next step for daily life.

Maybe you could put your head within their tank,
Wash out your drowning senselessbilities and thoughts.
Take off a couple layers to your core-all understanding,
Stop dithering about with complicated plots.

It's no use complaining,
Piling worries upon yourself.
Stop thinking. Stop trying. Just BE.

Think you're safe there, on your little raft of (t)reason?
You're incapable of dodging sharks or storms.
One good riptide yanks your feet right out from under,
If you try to stand up safe, there on the shore.

Be the fish.
Less anti-aquarian.
Existing, surviving and wet.
The daredevils of the Earth.
The first creatures to brave coming up onto land.
Do them the courtesy of learning how to swim.

Reviews

[ice]

One review, this place amazes me sometimes..a poem as simple and complex as this should be pondered by a hundred..not 28...sheesh!
Anyway, I like it-in many ways it tells of my on life experiences with nature, not only fish , but many creatures, even plants..that I am prone to talk to, even if someone is watching...

"It's no use complaining,
Piling worries upon yourself.
Stop thinking. Stop trying. Just BE."

Perfect, a poem within a poem.

enjoyed

[Dylan A. Miller]

I have to say, "Holy S**t, I love it", which doesn't happen to me very often when profile gazing. This is written wonderfully, but the point that you're making coupled with the metaphor that your using is just fantastic. Though I do want to point out in the second line i believe "contented" was supposed to be "content". Keep writing, for the world of literature's sake...its a misshapen thing now days.