Jump

different views on sex is holdin us back....just my thoughts

The words come so easy

As we talk in faded light.

You're my Valentine's date,

And here with you feels right.

 

We've been friends for over a year,

So knowing you isn't new.

And though more than friends is,

I'm not analyzing my next move.

 

Yes, I know you're older,

There's 6 years in the way.

I'm 20 and you're 26,

But the age gap feels like days.

 

I don't know what it is,

Why you make me smile.

I can't put my finger on it,

But I'd like to talk for a while.

 

Maybe it's your sense of humor,

Your random jokes make me laugh.

Maybe it's that when I'm with you,

I forget about the past.

 

I know there's a, "conflict of interests,"

I'm a virgin and you're not.

You don't put pressure on me,

But we don't know what we want.

 

So there's a complication

Standing in our way,

But why are we so worried?

This was just a first date.

 

I've spent too much time before

Worrying bout what's to come.

Let's just close our eyes and jump,

And deal with the mess when it's done.

Reviews

[littlelilypurplebride]

i wish i would of did this i rushed into life too fast but never did any of it as a teeager i did at 20 and i don't either of us was ready and we didn't we was young and dumb lol... but don't regret it have a beautiful blessing from god my son i got pergnet at 20 got married april 8,2000 had him when i was 21 June27,2000 listen to your heart be safe and don't rush and don't do anything you don't want to sexual but we also did it cause we we'er in love would only do it out of love and if i want to be with him for the rest of my life wouldn't do did with anyone it's great you know him so well. you a amazing job writing this so sweet. god bless lily

[Chris]

Beginnings are never complicated til they are...

Hope is a good wish...

Take care,
Chris

[TheFemininePad]

An interesting poem with quite a moral dilemma. Age shouldn't really matter as long as both persons are above 18. Men who are older tend to be more mature, but that is not always the case. You have to decide what is right for you in life, and deal with the consequences that come from that. I like your poem. I don't have any suggestions on how to improve upon it.

[Tate Morgan]

Actually men of a slightly older age of 5 6 or seven yrs tend to be good mates as they are a bit more settled and mature

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Nice pace...slow and easy. You will know when the time is right. I admire your thoughtfulness and patience concerning sex. Well written poem.

[Tathiana Milla Rodrigue..]

This was very catchy!! valentine is so good.

[Jim Parson]

This had a weird feel to it for me, Heather. Not in a bad way, I just wasn't sure how to feel about it, or how you were feeling about it as you wrote it. The actual words speak to hope and comfort, but I can't help but feel a tone of melancholy and confusion underlying it throughout, like all is well to the naked eye but something broils just below the surface. Great job on this one! (I'm glad to see you're back to rhyming, too!)

In the 2nd stanza..."And though more than friends is." Is that right or do I just need more coffee? It seems to be missing something.

[Dilan Gray]

I really like the lines "Let's just close your eyes and jump, And deal with the mess when it's done." I have done that a lot with relationships so I can relate to it really well. I also really liked the part about forgetting the past. Overall I think this was an amazing poem and you wrote it very well. You talk about some very relatable problems that people go through. I loved it!

[Kelley]

Well you seem a lot happier now....smiles
This was a great poem and you can feel how relaxed you are
when reading it. I like the flow of it and that it so truthful
in the feel of it.

Great write thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing wrong with slow and easy. Need to enjoy the discovery and new emotion with time and patience. Age is just a number. Good things take time. I like this poem. Love and sex are two different things. Love last forever. Sex is desire of the body. A excellent poem. You made me think too much again.
Coyote