I wrote this with the hopes of submitting an unrhyming poem for a grade in creative writing. I'm trying to grow as a writer, some honest opinions please! :)
wow i really like this and i think a lot of people can actually relate to this which is an important thing as a poet. reaching people and touching them. relating to the reader and them relating to you. very well written
This is an excellent poem. You have all the things in the right place, The rhym and tempo is consistant (So important for a non rhyming poem) and you have an easy fluidity (it allows the reader to run through it easily and yet focus on everything you say.) Your content is very deep and emotional and its got a real good haunting quality to it... Almost reminds me of a stalker or something.. This is an excellent write and a favorite for my library
This is very beautiful. Haunting and melancholy and moving. "The apparition of what was torments me"...just a fabulous line. Really well done, Heather!