Dear Matt,

written to Matt, obviously.

Every day drags by so slow now that I no longer hear your voice.

Your blade sinks deeper in my back as you stand by your choice.

Perhaps the pain wouldn't be so great had you given me some clue,

We were so perfect together, our love was long overdue.

You broke my heart the first time two long years ago,

But you begged me back, apologized, so I let your trespasses go.

And though I could tell you cared, you didn't really try,

You put forth little effort, paid little attention when I cried.

But I told myself I was happy, because I love you so.

I thought if I tried my best, this time you wouldn't go.

But my efforts proved futile, my hopes all came back false.

You ruined my hopes and dreams without so much as a call.

You crushed me with a text, just two simple, hateful lines,

But I refuse to cry, you don't deserve my tears this time.

I now see that you are sick, a weak little boy I see.

You hide behind your words, and enjoy further hurting me.

So swing away, take your shot, take me to the ground.

I won't give in, won't give you tears, I refuse to drown.

I'm stronger than you, and brave, wise beyond my years.

I'll move on without you, and I'll move past my fears.

Reviews

[Somer]

This poem came from the heart and is excellent. Everything fit perfectly. Great job and very well written!

[steph]

This poem was excellent too very deep and elloquent your words are an a sorrowful tribute to your sorrow

[Zoe Jay]

This is a nice write, it's very readable, and shows strength of character. It is sad but narrowly avoids being self-pitying, largely because it is self-aware and also because it has that tone of defiance throughout, and not only at the end. I like the even meter and rhythm and the line lengths, it shows discipline in the writing. Simple but effective rhyme scheme. There is very little description here, it's all narrative, which makes it a fast paced and emotionally challenging poem. I could see you developing this style into something more sophisticated in the future. Overall, it's really good.

[Dani]

It's refreshing to see this, rather than those "I'd die without you" poems. Wonderfully written, indeed. Great job.

[Claude]

I liked the building confidence as the poem went. There is almost a cockiness by the end. Good for you!

[Dane Osborne]

An honest and sincere piece. foolish is one who tries to find logic in the human heart....because there is no logic. To me when people talk about the conflict between the brain and the heart what they are really talking about is their own inner conflict between reality and illusion. When it comes to love people often like to have a "fairy tale" view. They want love to be something that saves them from reality but reality can't be overcome. So most of these people who go on about "thinking with their heart" when asked why they stay in a s****y relationship are really actually just in denial of reality. Thats just my take and thats what this made me think. Well done

[Frank F. Atanacio]

wow strong powerful entry integrity lost but the words profound Loved it

[John Stussy]

Whoa, this took a lot of courage to post something so personal. It's very powerfully written too. Chin up kid, you'll get past this.