HOW TO KNOW WHEN HE OR SHE IS THE RIGHT ONE

I figured I watch romance movies and love anything that has to do with romance I could give this short story a shot.

HOW TO KNOW WHEN HE OR SHE IS THE RIGHT ONE FOR YOU

BY:Lacey Reckner

Talking about love you guys here we go. When you love someone the one way to know it’s meant to be is when you look into his or her eyes and you’ll be the only one who can see the stars light up if you like someone else because the truth is if they like you back just as bad then he or she will accept you for you and won’t expect you to pretend to be someone you’re not.He or she will be the only one to give you butterflies in your stomach and it doesn’t matter if he is popular,cool,or ugly all that matters is that he means a lot to you and you accept him for him.Same for females it  doesn’t matter if she is popular,cool,or ugly all that matters is the same as males she will mean a lot to you.If you try to tell someone you love them don’t be afraid just know that no matter that person will always feel the same because love is no lie he or she will listen to you.

  Love is not only what you feel,but it’s what you do like saying “I love you” make them believe it show them what love means and what love is.Don’t make them feel like they don’t even exist because in the end you will be the one to cause them the pain no one else only you.I feel if you’re gonna say you love someone say something like “you mean the world to me and I can’t wait to spend the rest of my life with you right by my side .I just want to let you know that you’re my favorite everything,the one I hope to begin my story with,the one with a voice that repeatedly plays through my head,and the melody and harmony to a beautiful song I can only hear.Thank you for becoming a part of my life and thank you for stealing my heart and putting the pieces where they should be.

Love will come along and sweep you off your feet.If you don’t believe me well listen to this. Happiness is not a choice it’s an unexpected mood or gift because you never know if your life will be full of people that keep your happiness alive deep in your bones.If nobody is by your side to help protect the happiness you deserve then you’ll never be able to count on anyone to help protect it you’ll only be able to look at someone and say “after all this time you never helped me protect my happiness;you only cause me all the pain in the world.”

   I believe in luck because I believe in love.Although luck is unexpected so is love and to me love and luck are the same because you never know when to expect it.Everyone has the same lucky charm and that lucky charm is love.You can take someone on a romantic date to a park where you can lay a blanket down and just go watch the moonlight because it’s so beautiful and emotional.You should be able to lay your head on his or her chest to listen to their heartbeat and hold their hand while they hold you close to them to keep you warm and make you feel safe.It’s like people today don’t even know what love is because when people get married all they do is take their marriage for granted and don’t appreciate the love from another mate.

   Love can hurt sometimes it depends though.When it comes to this subject I wouldn’t say I’m an expert at love,but I know some what about it even though I’m only 16.

Author's Note

I was writing in my writing prompt book and just thought hey I should write a story about love it would be interested.

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[JayG]

A suggestion or three…

1. I'm not an expert at anything,but at least I can say I try.

So…if you know nothing about flying a plane, building a bridge, or removing an appendix, would you apply that thought to them? I hope not. Did you not see the original Star Wars? Have you not heard Yoda Tell Luke Skywalker: “Try not. Do or do not. There is no try.” ?

If you don’t know how to do something, take the time to learn how and make that skill yours. Unlike Luke, you can’t just magically reach inside and pull out the needed skills.

2. Stay away from run-on sentences. Your second sentence is 72 words long. And trim out the fat. That run-on sentence could say the same thing in sixteen words for a LOT more punch.

3. Work on your punctuation. It was created to help the reader know HOW to read your words. You already know, so you pause at the proper place, emphasize where it’s effective, and more. And trim out unneeded words and substitute one vivid word that says the same thing more meaningfully. Look at that run-on sentence I mentioned:

“When you love someone the one way to know it’s meant to be is when you look into his or her eyes and you’ll be the only one who can see the stars light up if you like someone else because the truth is if they like you back just as bad then he or she will accept you for you and won’t expect you to pretend to be someone you’re not.”

The first section reduces to:
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When you love someone, and it’s meant to be, you’ll see stars aglow within their eyes.
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The rest of the line is both a repetition of the same thought, and badly garbled. Have your computer read it aloud and you’ll hear it. In fact, have your computer read the whole piece aloud. You’ll hear what the reader gets, and see why restating, punctuation, and adding context can work wonders.

A personal suggestion: Toss those “writing prompts.” Using them can help practice skills you already have, but they will NOT teach you to write. And if fiction is one of your goals, you need more Our schooldays writing techniques are 100% nonfiction. Great for essays and reports, but it flat-out will not work for fiction because it uses a different set of techniques—a set not either mentioned or taught in your schooldays because the skills of ANY profession are learned IN ADDITION to the nonfiction skills you were given.

So, if writing is your goal, you need several things:

First: Pick up a copy of Strunk & White’s. Elements of Style. Don’t just read it, learn it. You’ll need it in every kind of writing you do, for the rest of your life. And, learning proper punctuation and presentation will raise your grades. (Better yet, have your personal Santa pick up a newer version: The Elements of Style: Updated and Annotated for Present-Day Use, on Amazon.)

Second: If writing stories is part of your plan, take the time to pick up the techniques of writing fiction. Thay’re nothing like the ones you were given in school. Without them, everything you write will read like a report, or a transcription of you speaking, neither of which work on the page.

I know you want to write, not study, and would prefer to just fix a word or two and have the words grow wings, but as Mark Twain observed: “It ain’t what you don’t know that gets you into trouble. It’s what you know for sure that just ain’t so.” And because you literally have fewof the techniques that working writers take for granted, you don’t know what you don’t know. Fix that, and you CAN give your words wings.

The local library system has lots of books on the subject, by pros in publishing, writing, and teaching. My personal suggestion for fiction, based on your writing, is Debra Dixon’s, GMC: Goal Motication & Conflict. It’s a warm easy read.

For a bit of the kind of thing she’ll give you, look at an article of two in my writing blog. They’re meant for the hopeful writer.

I know you posted this hoping for better news. And I wish I could give you that. But if you want to write, are taking the time to look for writing prompts, and seeking to please the reader, I thought you would want to know, because you can’t fix the problem you don’t see as being one.

Hang in there, and keep on writing.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/