Destroyer

Dedicated to C.J. Cherryh and The Threads of Time

Hallucination

Self invasion

Paranoia

Stupid theories

 

The world is ending

Who do you think you are to toy with this?

Make the end perpetual bliss

 

Time it lapses move no more

Forgot her face as she went out that door

Threads of time they will destroy

Here today and here no more

 

End of time is here for sure

Destroyer have we gone too far

What’s this world existing for  

 

Destroyer we have forsaken you

He was here then here no more

Destroyer what shall you have us do 

Reviews

[tamsin]

I love the line 'I forgot her face as she went out the door'...it really stayed with me...

[KAOlmsted]

...I am so in love with your first stanza I want to take it to Paris and propose to it in the shadow of the Eiffle Tower...okay?

The rest...meh...you tried too hard.

You'll get there...keep up the hard work!
-kimmer

[Barbara Walker]

Really like the second stanza! This flows very well and it is not a common topic.

[Kathrine]

very intresting

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Has such a nice flow and and rhythm. It evokes such powerful emotion. Great job :)

[Kris Zee]

I love the beginning, so simple, so clear, stating it like it was forced onto you. Quite powerful feeling :)

[GypsyAlien3303]

This is great. I loved how you controlled the pace. :)

[Felicity's Eve]

Wow. Just...wow. You have amazing talent!

[Kelsey]

"Time it lapses move no more
Forgot her face as she went out that door"

Your writing is never anything short of amazing. You blow me away with every new piece.

[JayBird]

I really enjoyed this. It has good imagery, and the rhythm of rhymes makes it feel almost tense and fast paced, which seems to fit the plot. Great write!