Many in Hell

You’re going through hell.

Well you better keep moving.

It doesn’t seem to be ending.

Bless you for still pushing.

 

As one we are week.

Many we are strong.

Just think,

Keep pursuing,

Continue to seek

 

The many in hell!

Now I see you marching.

Come on out swinging.

It’s inspiring

 

To think

I’m really witnessing

Someone that was ready to sink.

You’re rising above anything,

Everything that made you weak.

Somehow it can heal!?

Meanwhile juxtaposing,

Health and killing,

What was once restraining.

I hope it doesn’t sound like complaining.

 

It leaves me thinking,

What about him, her, and me?

If this rebellion made you king,

Why can’t we set ourselves free?

I see what you’re doing. 

See what I’m saying?

Reviews

[James William Dyer]

Nice work, and I liked the flow especially

[Ruth]

Clever...
Walk together and know truth or walk in myriad directions and shatter the the goal...butterfly effect...we could all learn so much, united, if we tried xox

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Wow, I really loved this one! It has a great flow to it and I love the tone/message with it. It's a great piece, awesome work!

[MissEpic2902]

This is amazing!! It sent a chill down my spine!! Great work! :)

[Ees]

I LOVE the last line of the first stanza. great!
"Somehow it can heal!?"- I like the words, but I am not the biggest fan of the double punctuation. It makes it look like a text or something, I'd choose one or the other or leave it off if it were me.

I really enjoyed reading this! I see what you are getting at and I agree with the sentiments.

Great job

[Barbara Walker]

Love the rhythm of this piece. Last two lines are my favorites!

[J. Viands]

Y is it the last two lines get you I mean as far as I can tell their random as could be but thanks for the review

[Barbara Walker]

Because you are taking it all in, observing, focused and then writing about it, conveying all your thoughts, . Those last two lines are like a command, almost, for your words to be read just as intently.

[J. Viands]

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