Don't Listen to Those Lies

Just because they say it,

doesn't mean it's true

If they are rude to you,

I will sing them a quite mean tune.

Princess you must pick up your head,

for your tiara is falling.

I wan't you to know,

you have a friend in you.

I will stand bye you,

through thick and thin.

Don't listen to those lies,

you may feel you are drowning in

Save yourself right now,

quit thinking about them.

Pick up your tiara,

for you rule over those peasants.

One day they will work for you,

and have nothing to say,

But until that very day,

await your custom king.

So stop harming

a beuatiful body,

for beautiful bodies

are meant to overrule 

Author's Note

I know it doesn't rhyme that much

Reviews

[InsanityWriter]

"I will stand bye you,
through thick and thin.
Don't listen to those lies,
you may feel you are drowning in"

This is personally my favorite verse ^^^. The entire thing was well done though. ^_^ Good job!! :D

[haymaker14]

Thanks you :) I appreciate your helpful review!

[Death Girl]

Its good but could use some work buit opverall good job. keep writing

[haymaker14]

Thanks

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

No need to make rhyme to make the poem good, your work connects to the reader and that all that matters. :) i find this piece honest and captivating. just keep writing. This is a great write, I believe in this piece.

[haymaker14]

Thanks :) I tried.. but you are right, not all poems rhyme :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) just follow your heart it will do magic

[haymaker14]

:) Thanks for the tip

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome :)

[Wórdsmíth]

well, buddy, that's a nice one as i read, yeah, i read your author's note, there you''ve written that "it doesn't rhyme that much", well, then how much it's rhyme...lol
just kiddin' man, it's good to read..to think...to analyse, even i like such kinda an inspirational pieces' ...yeah, it's quite seemin' alike inspirational one...
well, it doesn't matter your word...you writin'...your poetry does rhyme or not, it does matter how you convert reality into your own words in an appropriate manner and i saw here depth..i felt here depth in your this writin'...it's a piece...
i'm not gonna critize you anymore, but "believe on you, if you think it's good, then all'll think ...read ...it's good...be positive man..
well, i think, it's a inspirational writin' and if i got somethin' to you to say, then i wanna say, instead of rhyme, your this writin'' has contained deepness, inspirations, analysation, thoughts, and so more...
well written, your writin' ink 's nice and words're the biggest thing that i liked here in your writin' and moreover if i got to say to you, your thoughts, your tittle, your concept, and your imagination plus thinkin' all were/are of high level...

[haymaker14]

Thanks you for reviewing :) Yes I tried to go in depth as much as possible

[Alexander Rodgers]

A nice meaning and concept, I like it. Noticed a mistake,
''I will stand bye you,'' Bye should be by. But that's the only one I found. Could I suggest putting in some more powerful verbs? It would help with the flow. But you have a pretty good thing going here

[chaotic katie]

Very inspireing poem! the imagery is wonderful and it flows well too! mind if i read request it to some of my friends on here, might help you to collect some reveiws if you want.

[haymaker14]

Sure,sure! I wouldn't mind at all! I am really glad you liked this one. I wasn't sure it was exactly good with the rhyming... lol

[chaotic katie]

thats alright, some of my poetry dosn't have a rhyme scheme at all. i'll mention you to a few of my friends if it helps.

[haymaker14]

That would help a bunch :) Thank you :). I haven't sen one mean person on here. Everyone on here I have known is so nice and on my poems that have something a bit mixed up they don't shout at me, they kindly tell me! I love this website!! XD

[haymaker14]

Seen

[chaotic katie]

me too, these are people who want to give tips and swap ideas run new pieces by one another and its a great place to meet new friends. Also i love the freedom with groups and blogs and shareing work.

[haymaker14]

Yeah, me too. You can get out your feelings, and even my friend is on here so we love to share our works,review each other, submit each others contests,etc! I have met tons of new,accepting friends! This is the best writing site because there are so many fun things to do- even if you aren't writing! :)

[chaotic katie]

yup, i have my boyfriend and my best friend on here so i know how that is.

[haymaker14]

haha yeah... I am as single as a pringle but I don't care lol

[chaotic katie]

don't be ashamed relationships are hard to maintain and sometimes not even worth the drama and "single as a pringle", thats a cute saying made me chuckle a bit haha the perks of being a writer huh? :P

[haymaker14]

Yeah true. Haha yeeeep the perks of being a writer :D

[chaotic katie]

:)