Take A Second Look

I'm diving...

Deeper into the darkness...

Further from the light.

I'm trying...

Avoiding being heartless...

Doing something right.

I'm dying...

Slowly becoming harmless...

Refusing to fight.

I'm lying...

Becoming one of the breathless...

Losing all my might.

I dived into darkness away from the streetlights.

I tried to do something right pushing him away from headlights.

I died and took his place in the street.

I lied there watching the driver retreat.

I saved his life by giving my own.

I will die with my deed unknown.

Author's Note

Another quick write, experimenting with new ideas.
Reviews encouraged!

Reviews

[Natalie]

This is a really good poem Christoph! The format is good too. Great write! :)

[BlueberryKisses]

This is really good, the format is awesome and the poem itself is great :) good job

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really cool, but sad!

[Kayla K]

That was an amazing format, same as the poem! I enjoyed it a lot.

[WynterPhoenix]

I enjoyed this very much. The formatting you've done with this is brilliant. You're words make you think, yet they were easily understood. Great write!

[Miss Sally Sunshine]

I lovedd how the formatting was different and new, and it had an impact on the poem. I loved the over all poem, too. Great job!!

[XShadowXFoxX]

Amazing. It's beautiful.

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

"I'm lying...
Becoming one of the breathless...
Losing all my might."
I could relate so much to this stanza. This poem was amazing. Like what Ta'shandra Bradley said, the formatting was good. Keep writing :) 100/100

[Tasha]

This was really good. I loved the big little formatting, it really gave a visual impact. I loved it!