Lamenting Soldier

Take a deep breath,

I accepted my death.

I went in with the best,

I died with the rest.

No one saw them coming.

We were busy running,

straight into the fray.

Massacred by our own prey.

The plan seemed clear,

we were without fear.

Charge through the right,

we'll be out of their sight,

and flank the rangers.

We were aware of the dangers.

But they ambushed us instead,

within seconds we were dead.

Now I stand here above the bodies,

watching the prey enjoy their bounties.

If I could alter this event,

our deaths I would prevent.

Author's Note

5-minute quick write.
Reviews encouraged :]

Reviews

[Kayla K]

I would never suspect you did this in 5 minutes - it's great! Captures what I would think goes through a soldier's mind.

[Queen of Hearts]

I loved this, I can't put my finger on what my favorite part was, but it was a wonderful write. Good job :)

[Sukriti Suki]

I read it in one go and this piece speaks volumes.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. War is in seconds. Battles can seem forever when your life is in danger. I like the feel and the emotion of this poem. I like the ending. If we could not kill or kill another. We could live or died with a good conscious. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tasha]

This was amazing I loved this.

[DeadToTheWorld]

this was awesome!! total emotion...it made me want to cry because my grandpa was in the army...he died of a heart attack in 2000...for a strange reason it made me think of him....I love this poem...

[Katannaism]

Very strong, dangerous piece. Its also quite picturesque about the fight/battle. A very fiery poem indeed. Great job! ;)

[Not Available]

I really like this especialy this line: "Massacred by our own prey." :)