Lamenting Soldier

Take a deep breath,

I accepted my death.

I went in with the best,

I died with the rest.

No one saw them coming.

We were busy running,

straight into the fray.

Massacred by our own prey.

The plan seemed clear,

we were without fear.

Charge through the right,

we'll be out of their sight,

and flank the rangers.

We were aware of the dangers.

But they ambushed us instead,

within seconds we were dead.

Now I stand here above the bodies,

watching the prey enjoy their bounties.

If I could alter this event,

our deaths I would prevent.

Author's Note

5-minute quick write.
Reviews encouraged :]

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

This partially reminds me of a zombie apocalypse, and how I see a person standing on a sidewalk, watching all the zombies enjoy all the living people around them, tearing them apart. But anyways, soldiers deserve a lot of credit for choosing to put their lives on the line for us. Even for many they don't know, they are able to man up and take control of the situation. Good story told by the way. Just to add to this review. :)

[TheMizFit]

Your poems never fail to amaze me :)

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Hmm Awesome Rhythm :) and You deserve Hats off !!

Phenomenal and Outstanding Write :)

[Natalie]

Wow, this is really good for a 5 minute write! I love the rhyming too! :D 100/100 rating!

[Hayley]

Wow, five minutes? None of your rhymes seem too forced (A pet peeve of mine) and it was very straight-forward and a fast read, for me at least. Nice write :)

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Again, really strong and cool!

[XShadowXFoxX]

Very nice. It's a very strong poem and flows very well. The rhyming was a nice touch. Amazing that you did this in a 5-minut equick write.

[Ashley]

Wow this is awesome. sounds like a cool rap song. amazing job!

[Letemdangle]

I knew when I read it, it was fast and off the cuff. Still I love battle scenes, especially sword fights. This made me think of them.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very good, very enjoyable read!