Unfinished Business

I toss and turn in my grave,

Revenge is what I crave.

Lost in this madness,

I roam ever aimless.

No longer can I hear,

So no longer do I fear.

Killed by a sound,

I felt the bullet pound

through my chest,

I thought I was at my best.

I have lost my sight

I no longer have a will to fight.

Killed for what I saw,

the police I tried to call,

but the bullet moved too fast.

Who knew that breath would be my last?

I'm unable to taste any flavor,

So this second chance I cannot savor.

There is only one taste left on my tongue,

the blood that spilled from my lung,

as that bullet traveled through me.

I only have hope in liberty.

Truth and justice shall punish you,

and I shall not rest until they do.

Author's Note

The bullet is figurative, it resembles an event in life that changes you for the worse. Whether its a family death, betrayal, whatever you think fits.

Reviews

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

excellent rhyming of stanzas...very good beginning and ending of the poem...the beginning was simple but insanely great rhymes..and the middle and the ending became more interesting, the short storytelling was good and it was bursting with such emotions..i thought this poem is an brilliant poem bec. of not just the excellent rhyming but also the great plot /story of the poem is expressing and it is insanely but greatly expressed.....BRAVO!

[TheMizFit]

This is amazing. I love how the bullet resembles an event. It all fits. Plus, I love the flow of the poem :) Great job.

[Darkbynight]

Oh my freaking chickens! This was absolutely amazing! I was sucked in by the end of the 3rd line, and my mouth had dropped open and I was drooling slightly by the 8th...(dont' judge me when I say that :D)
Your symbolism is fantastic. :) I love it...wow....I was going to try to put down my favorite stanza, so I highlighted the start of a line, but I just kept going and going, because I liked the whole thing...I'm rambling now...so Imma go...
Great job :D

[Deck_As_Heck]

amazing. simply amazing.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

i love how you seem to rhyme every single poem it seems like.. i cant rhyme to save my life lol great poem

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

This is wonderful. I loved the way the words flowed. You are a very talented poet. I could relate to this :)
Keep writing [:

[BrokenAngelicHeart]

I like the fact that though it's but a poem, a story is spun through the choice of words you use. Along with the rhymes, this makes the poem flow and brings us readers along with the plot. X3

[Vanessa Rico]

I loved the way this piece flowed! Your work is flawless as always!

[Also known as Clare.]

rated: 1 billion :)

[Skateprincess]

I loved this piece especially the first few lines about the restless corpse in its grave. You have a way with words which dazzles me