Statue

Be wise and quiet,

peace in breaths,

incomprehensible.

 

Soar like lost snakes

salvage winglessness,

like rocks steady

emotionless.

 

Alleviate soothing fires

with cool cement juices

dripping smooth

down heart valves

where desire sparked,

 

a statue’s blood beats

without needs.

Reviews

[Vanessa]

The first stanza of this was rather witty and clever, and really depicts
how being wise and quiet can make one seem incomprehensible.

The second stanza, too, relates words in such a great way, for
instance, 'soaring snakes' and 'salvaging winglessly'. The last two lines of
this stanza communicates a comparison of steady rocks to emotionlessness,
which is truly understandable, the way the being too steady with thoughts
can make one lack emotion.

This was brilliant.

[Liz Alexander]

I love the last stanza! Great work.

[Red Brick Keshner]

And us mortals each day breath to fuel blood to satisfy so many needs.
Makes me jealous of statues. Good to be reading you again.

[Dylan Cook]

Unique and powerful

[J.P.O.et]

I really enjoyed this one Travis. I am also struck by the last two lines,

'A statue's blood beats
without needs.'

This brings to mind particular lines I read in 'Grief' by Elizabeth Barret Browning

'Most like a monumental statute set
In everlasting watch and moveless woe
Till itself crumble to the dust beneath.
Touch it; the marble eyelids are not wet:
If it could weep, it could arise and go.'

Alas a very thought provoking and 'moving' piece. Thank you for sharing.

J.P.O.et

[April Child]

Love those last lines

a statue's blood beats
without needs.

Wouldn't that be wonderful, no needs, just being. Nice, evocative poem. Gave me a feeling of peace reading it.

Alleviate soothing fires
with cool cement juices
dripping smooth
down heart valves
where desire sparked,

Great to see you back!