A Present Of Nothing New

An observation and a question

a shade of brighter green leaves lies below

                the inside of the air of half           open windows

breathes              the winds and breezes

                pine needles                      sticks the air

and rises to dull and darkened

                           greenly

through slanted glass swallows

           in vibrancies

 

dead and dyed gray skies play

                                off white clouds depressed to sense

           a relaxed breath only

           coldly exhaled

from real into reality

           frozen

                in now

                                a present of nothing new

 

                No past but repetition

                No future            but

                what’s to be                       done?

Author's Note

I just read Larry Eigner, and his work inspired me to write this. Let me know your opinion.

Reviews

[Vince]

Not sure exactly if the layout is specific to the meaning of this, but I found myself with two (or three) different poems of differing lengths because of it, which is a good thing because hey, if you can make a multiple poems in one, that's even better. I'm an advocate for brevity most of the time, so seeing this makes me giddy.

"a present of nothing new"

absolutely the best line

[No One Important]

I do like the use of color in this poem...the spacing is interesting and not as distracting as it could have been...all in all, a good piece.

I love how you've laid this out- especially in the first part where it goes:
the inside of the air of half open windows

I love the way it represnts open windows- it's clever and cool- you obviously put alot of thought into the formatting as well as the words :) and that's one step further then most people go. So well done! :) Do keep sending me the requests- I love to read the quality you produce!:D xx

[Kasey Klein]

Hi Travis.

I don't know what to make of it. The images are good. The formatting throws me off.

It's a nice effort.

Always good to see you.