A Present Of Nothing New

An observation and a question

a shade of brighter green leaves lies below

                the inside of the air of half           open windows

breathes              the winds and breezes

                pine needles                      sticks the air

and rises to dull and darkened

                           greenly

through slanted glass swallows

           in vibrancies

 

dead and dyed gray skies play

                                off white clouds depressed to sense

           a relaxed breath only

           coldly exhaled

from real into reality

           frozen

                in now

                                a present of nothing new

 

                No past but repetition

                No future            but

                what’s to be                       done?

Author's Note

I just read Larry Eigner, and his work inspired me to write this. Let me know your opinion.

Reviews

[Vince]

Not sure exactly if the layout is specific to the meaning of this, but I found myself with two (or three) different poems of differing lengths because of it, which is a good thing because hey, if you can make a multiple poems in one, that's even better. I'm an advocate for brevity most of the time, so seeing this makes me giddy.

"a present of nothing new"

absolutely the best line

[robin]

At first glance I can't even recall what I just read because I was drawn into the physical arrangement of the words. They form a series of cloudlike shapes, very zen serendipitous! Each cloud brings different stanzas.
And they also fit the poem like leaves. Fascinating found art.

[An owl on the moon]

Absolutely love the movement of the words, as well as the brilliant sights and smells. You so effortlessly create a world with each word and phrase...

[Sandra K]

This poem reminds me of history and how it repeates itself. The same action, but with a small change here and there. It is time for something new, great poem! I enjoy your work, i can't wait to own a hard copy of it!

Thanks for sharing!

Sandra K!

[Shadows of Sight]

I had to read it twice, but once i got the image down, the layout made perfect sense.

I got the image of one who sat at an open window unsure of the fate of the world. Seeing only the breath from his mouth be wisped out and fall as freezing particles of ice. The clouds seemed to fluctuate but never break into full on sunshine.
The grey overbearing and pushing the one at the window back inside.
Like a child that wants to go out and play, yet can't because of bad weather.

I liked this! :)

[TL Boehm]

Well done - a thinking person's poem for sure. Awesome imagery in this one....

[J.P.O.et]

Yeah, the layout was a little confusing at first but I
get what you were doing I think.
' a present of nothing new
No past but repetition'
History repeating itself and not learning from our mistakes and great question
at the end. Makes me think.

J.P.O.et

[Erin Phoenix]

The layout was confusing at first before I read it

But while I was reading it I understood it better

I saw the pines and its appearance you put it out as

It was a very good read.

Short but lovely.

:) Keep up the good work my friend.

[Adam Jordan Turner]

WOW! I know everything you write is always amazing but this is just brilliant! I absolutely love your work. It's so good I really don't know what to say about it sometimes. I always find myself lost for words after reading a piece of yours. However, speaking of words, I think what i like most about this piece is your choice of words. I just love the way you say things in this piece, ways I would never think to express something. My favorite part, aside from the title of the piece itself, is "dead and dyed gray skies play

off white clouds depressed to sense"

I love the way you worded that part there. I also love this part,

"a present of nothing new



No past but repetition

No future but

what's to be done?"
That right there is just stunning and an absolutely perfect ending, and unfortunately for some it's SO true. Such a bold truth, that is, it's very sad. I wish I knew more about poetry because your layout would mean a lot more to me then, but even as being sort of a dilettante when it comes to poetry, I know that this piece is just pretty much incredible over all. I'm also just a huge fan of every thing you write! Great write my friend! I look forward to more!!!

[KayOss]

Is it possible to actually feel cool and refreshed after reading a piece of poetry? I hope so, or I'm in trouble! The imagery was so strong that I could almost feel a cool breeze blowing over me. I loved the verdant greens and the lush reminders of life abundant. I must also say that I loved the line "a present of nothing new." That really stood out to me.

The formatting was different; it took some getting used to. However, I managed to adjust well and enjoy the poetry. I'm always happy to read you. :)