Piano Keys

I'm alluding...

The piano’s keys savored her fingerprints,

proof they once had played

the way grass regards its resplendent green tint,

a stained signer of sodden rain.

In four thirsty years they did not make a sound,

and soon they behaved

like a cast atmosphere that abhors its clouds,

cool, gray, and its reason shaded.

Turn the piano keys, miss, they are stringent,

unloved and untouched,

and let them sing their day of independent

notes they play, uninterrupted.

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

this brought so many images to mind - the literal of a forgotten, dusty piano - devoid of the wonderful music it could produce - to images of more metaphorical lines - a life lived lonely - devoid of the companionship it craves. excellent work here.

laura

[Michael W. Farrelly]

This is a really beautiful piece, Travis. Very mature and insightful in it's longing for the carress of a lover. Impressive.

[Adam Jordan Turner]

This one almost reminds me of a painting for some reason...I can't pin point it exactly but I could really see this one, It is also a very good write. I had another write explain to me how less is more with poetry sometimes, like it packs a bigger punch; well this, i think, is a pretty good example of that. I like the simplicity. Great write!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very nice. Poor piano. That piano could use some company. :(

-Gabe

[Kara Emily Krantz]

"The piano's keys savored her fingerprints,"

perfect line. one of the best lines i've come across in forever.

it could be a poem in itself lol
love this

[Kasey Klein]

Hey Travis.

"If hope has flown away, in a night or in a day," the piano is just as quiet.

Nicely written, a good reflection.

[TL Boehm]

beautifully written. I am a 'frustrated musician wannabe' and love this type of writing anyway. But speaking from as unbiased as I can be this is pure poetry.

[laceyjane23]

I like this poem, you really know how to use descriptive words!
laceyjane

[Vince]

I wonder what you were alluding to here..

sometimes those piano keys have a mind of their own. especially the ones in the piano that seem to always play at two in the morning in the music room downstairs. I would've never connected piano keys to fingers and blades of grass, no sirree

[Alicia Isabella Lane]

Wow .... amazing the imagery is so tangible you can almost taste the words. You are an amazing writer!!! Very powerful, an awesome piece.

[Sandra K]

How nice. I love piano music.
Good write!