Why I Write

Why I Write

A Poem by Travis Lawrence
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The title (which explains the poem) is from a George Orwell essay. Otherwise, he has nothing to do with this.

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I want to be the great poet,

and let you see at least part of me.

 

Eyes will either laminate like stoics,

sealed, emotionlessly clear,

and still, a stale rain-fell puddle.

 

Or minds will walk streamlined

and warm in the wake of my gusty ideas.

 

----

 

Stalking my weakness

is a spear-tipped predator,

and most that you see

leads to its dark and charming door.

 

I (and maybe you) stumble through,

oblivious.

 

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I missed my flight

on the aeroplane

scheduled to drop my ashes

over the sea,

so they scatter over paper as I die.

© 2008 Travis Lawrence


Author's Note

Travis Lawrence
Do you like the breaks? And let me know whether you caught the music reference in the last stanza :-) Thank you!

p.s. the music reference is Neutral Milk Hotel ;-)

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Great write! I like how you spelled "aeroplane" to make it flow better. (is that the music reference?) lol I'm not too good with stuff like that...

I want to be the great poet,
and let you see at least part of me.

Great lines! These explain the very reason so many of us choose to write!
Through poetry we can let another side of us be out in the open because in real life we are afraid to let it shine...
I look forward to reviewing more of your work!
-D

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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i really love it. you seem to love writing veryy much and i do too. when i die i want to bring my beautiful work with me also :) i have been wanting to write a poem about why i write and why i love it but it just dosnt sound very good yet. nice job!

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The breaks help to add mayer to this piece. Absolutely amazing last line.....you may or may not be, but this is the work of a great poet. More like it, please.

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This is awesome,
I personally like the breaks,
'Leavin on a jet plane, don't know if I'll be back again'???
Anyway I absolutely love this last verse, 'so they scatter over paper as I die.', Powerfull
J.P.O.et

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Travis, I'm a bit confused with your use of the adjective, "stoics" ....
"Eyes will either laminate like stoics".

But, I was impressed with your closing verse...I'm not sure of the musical reference applied here, but it reads brilliantly!

My hat is off to you, once again!

: )

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Well yes, we all write to strive to be one of the greatest. Sure, most of us will not get there, but it doesn't help to try. You don't even need to actually try. Greatness is usually recognized sooner or later in some laudatory form worthy of it. I actually like poetry that breaks the confines of its form. I don't mind weird breaks and line lengths or whatever you guys call them.

Musical reference! Neutral Milk Hotel perhaps? In An Aeroplane Over the Sea? If so, looks like we have similar tastes.

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

While you may not be singular. I believe you to be A great poet and that should be good for anyone...not necessarily good enough...but good none the less...The breaks confused me...it made it seem almost like three different poems...but it flowed well and it was powerful in intent...well done...

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great write! I like how you spelled "aeroplane" to make it flow better. (is that the music reference?) lol I'm not too good with stuff like that...

I want to be the great poet,
and let you see at least part of me.

Great lines! These explain the very reason so many of us choose to write!
Through poetry we can let another side of us be out in the open because in real life we are afraid to let it shine...
I look forward to reviewing more of your work!
-D

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Travis Lawrence
Travis Lawrence

Austin, TX



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I'm a 29-year-old using this site to backup my writings, which are mostly poems. Leave a comment if you like, they always make me smile. Have a nice day! more..

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