Near My Roots

A love that never grew

I want to be your sunflower,

a seed planted in life’s garden.

I'll grow tall through cutting stems,

and shade your pain.

 

But, I only see your shadow from the past.

The longer it gets the shorter it lasts.

Reviews

[J.P.O.et]

Short poems are a lost art so you are a renaissance man
I never looked at so few words for so long and I am still capturing their meaning
'I'll grow tall through cutting stems', is this like you will get stronger by getting cut down
and of course the last two lines were phenom, Great job Travis
J.P.O.et

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

short, simple words with deep meaning - a great write :)

[J.P. Bristow]

I don't know if you were perhaps toying with Van Gogh's vanity here but thats what I get from it....serious...silent yet thoughtful. The sunflower has come to represent almost Utopian ideals........strength to be found in a flower..now there's a thought to ponder in itself......I wonder what Jung would say about that lol lol...lovely write.

[Kasey Klein]

Hey Travis.

(technically, a sunflower offers little shade and its root's a small clump, like a fist, easily pulled from the earth)

I've often wondered about the rock song: "I want to be your sledgehammer," which make no sense to me at all. Maybe a pair of pliers? A quarter-inch drive socket driver?

I like the theme, well presented. "Shadow from the past" is a good line.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

love the image of a sunflower. love the brevity of this, and the brief yet powerful statements within your words :)

lovely

[TL Boehm]

those two lines are a real clincher. Great poem - I usually cant even get started in six lines but you penned an entire relationship with clarity.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

So many thoughts conveyed in so few words. Simply breathtaking. As for the relationship, these things usually have a way of working out for the best. Keep your chin up, camper!

-Gabe

[Hold Fast Hope]

I agree with everyone else here. Short, but it still tells a story. Well done.

[Amor-de-angel]

Nice effective little poem. well done

[Caddie O'brien]

Short but very effective kind of like an unexpected yummy small candy!