poem: Ephemeral Promises

speak, my dear friend, of naught but truth forever more, and be not afraid to shine

Ephemeral Promises

Visit me tonight, while you dream of beautiful things-
like the dew, the starlight, the way the wind rustles the leaves-
and the revelations confessed only in hints-
While reality was held, for that moment, suspended.

Tease my creative mind awake with your startling insight ,
Soothe my troubled heart with your kindest words
Take this exhausted body gently into your embrace-
And make love to my spirit as if forever were really ours to grasp.

Let the dew soak into our raimants cast upon the ground
and the starlight sustain us in remembered innocence-
Let the breezes carry the cries of two hearts' longing,
to that place where dreaming souls entwine, dancing in the open air

The fireflies will blaze like beacons of hope in this world-
as nebulas explode in our hearts in another,
Your inner diamond’s light filling and replenished by
The whispered breath of my soul, passing by, and through-

 

a messenger, perhaps, if nothing more. Awaken- for you have been freed.

 

Reviews

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I am speechless , you did it again , and this time , its one of the most beautiful love poems I ever read :)

Let the breezes carry the cries of two hearts' longing,
to that place where dreaming souls entwine, dancing in the open

What can I say, when two souls belongs to each other, the distance is double, the more you try to get closer , you feel the way just become longer , when two souls love each other, there is no distance between, just the time that will pass , until they meet again :)

Yossi

[Jibey]

A beautifully romnantic scene, using the natural elements to caress the lovers in their desire... I was espedcially struck by the dew on their cast-off clothes and the breeze carrying away their cries of delight

[Georgia Gypsy]

This piece is so beautiful, to try to break it down and explain how much i love this would destroy its magic....so i will simply say 'thank you for sharing'....and this is going in my fav's....to read again!
k:)

[cest la vie]

Ahh, yes I see.. very clearly now and I graciously thank you for the request. Damn, what a spellbinding, beautiful poem you wrote.
"The fireflies will blaze like beacons of hope in this world-
as nebulas explode in our hearts in another,
Your inner diamond's light filling and replenished by
The whispered breath of my soul, passing by, and through-
a messenger, perhaps, if nothing more. Awaken- for you have been freed."

A more beautiful summation I have never read. Thank you for this request . Truly mind-wakening.
Thanks,
Lynne

[John McGrael]

(and i just recently learned what ephemeral means in english class at school, im glad i knew while reading this)
:P

[John McGrael]

DAMN!!!!!!

your imagery, your word choice, your poetic abilities
are all outstanding
i am left speechless (luckily im typing this review)

this is one of the few poems which has left me wishing i could write like you do
with such flawless imagery
such mind-blowing word choice

you have teased my creative mind with insight :)

[J Carly]

Speechless, indeed. Thank you for entering this in the Dreamscape contest. It's breathtaking. I shall pass this one along. You have made the first cut, and I would not be surprised if you are a finalist. Beautiful!

[Ellen Hammond]

Simply beautiful. Softly flowing with passion and longing. Love your imagery too.

[Mark]

"...let the breezes carry the cries of two hearts' longing to that place where dreaming souls entwine, dancing..."

How blessed is he who, despite a remove of a thousand miles, is as real to her as if the distance were but an inch? Indeed, what a blessing he, as well! Whether he was once there, but left, or was never there, but yearned to be, he is yet there, to all intents and purposes. love at a remove is no less love for that.

[J.K.P.]

This was beautifully written. I am going through a long distance relationship, and this gives me the greatest feeling of hope.
"Visit me tonight, while you dream of beautiful things-"
Your words make it seems so easy, so wistful, that love should transcend time and distance, that no matter what, two souls who were meant to be will continue to be connected. There is a pleasant and sensual tone to this poem, I really loved it. :]