poem: Looking Back Upon Our Generation

poem: Looking Back Upon Our Generation

A Chapter by Marie Anzalone

 

A thing, set in motion, is incapable of standing still,

We come to where decisions must be made

The bow is drawn, the arrow now looses where we will.

 

Mockery of truthspeakers gives permission for a later kill:

We could find such great diversions as those plans are laid;

The bow is drawn, the arrow now looses where we will.

 

Or we make a stand, as taught by a prophet from His hill

We can choose ascension as the place for which we prayed-

A thing, set in motion, is incapable of standing still.

 

Shall we find we have delighted in the bloodlust of the thrill,

Turn after to see jagged spaces where our children played?

The bow is drawn, the arrow now looses where we will.

 

Or will we let dreamers sing our future through burning quill,

Invoke their wisdom as into complex rivers we must wade?

A thing, set in motion, is incapable of standing still.

 

This was never, for us, just one more mindless tv drill

At our close would we recall what left, honor what has stayed?

The bow is drawn, the arrow now looses where we will

A thing, set in motion, is incapable of standing still.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 



© 2013 Marie Anzalone


Author's Note

Marie Anzalone
villanelle... tough form. Constructive critique welcomed.

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Hope I die before I get old. That is what was said. But we did.
To use a strict form to peruse your thoughts on the thoughts of dreamers is to be very much admired. If that is not straining the statement beyond breaking point. Perhaps it would be better to say I admire this piece very much and wish I could do the same.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

I think too many people get acclimated to dying a little every day. There coems a tipping point, I w.. read more



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I don't feel qualified to give you constructive criticism on form - a lot of τђє time I simply trust my instincts. What I can tell you is that I found myself reading these lines aloud - and it sounded good! In τђє end that is τђє final test for me. Your repeated lines are haunting and I suspect that they will echo in my head all day. Thank you so much for this enjoyable reading experience Marie.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

You are welcome, Carlton. I am glad you found me here, and glad you enjoyed this. I have a big proje.. read more
I've heard that Villanelle is a tough form. There is another write on her ~ Lori Carlson ~ who has done some in that form. You have written this excellently. I love the repetition, it really adds to the write. You've written a really effective write, Marie. Something I really enjoyed reading!

~ Noodle.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

The villanelle is and extremely tough form because the repetition and rhyme scheme are so restrictiv.. read more
Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

*an extremely tough form- typing in the dark here
Hope I die before I get old. That is what was said. But we did.
To use a strict form to peruse your thoughts on the thoughts of dreamers is to be very much admired. If that is not straining the statement beyond breaking point. Perhaps it would be better to say I admire this piece very much and wish I could do the same.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

I think too many people get acclimated to dying a little every day. There coems a tipping point, I w.. read more
villanelle is tough...and you did the form nicely..this sounds smooth as silk..there is no hint of the effort put into getting the form just right.

the repetition of certain lines really work with this theme...back in the 60's something started---

and unfortunately after it accomplished some things, it stalled..and died out.

really relate to this write.

very well done.

jacob

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

Thank you, jacob. I agree... it is a very tough form to write, and I am glad my efforts do not feel .. read more
Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

I also agree that repetition of the lines in the villanelle form increases their power ten-fold. IWh.. read more
i think it is beautiful, complex and honest

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily B

11 Years Ago

it really is, but I've been thinking if we travel so often together, if we share our strengths and c.. read more
Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

there is strength in numbers... but sometimes just having one other person who believes you and beli.. read more
Emily B

11 Years Ago

i agree with my whole heart

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Marie Anzalone
Marie Anzalone

Xecaracoj, Quetzaltenango, Guatemala



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Bilingual (English and Spanish) poet, essayist, novelist, grant writer, editor, and technical writer working in Central America. "A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to ta.. more..

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