poem: If it Were That Simple

poem: If it Were That Simple

A Chapter by Marie Anzalone

If it were that simple-

     I would write "I'm Sorry"

  by rearranging constellations

           to spell those letters

        across the night sky

             itself.

 

I cannot, because

    you do not exist.

 

but this is how the heart implodes,

        under its own

     internal pressure-

        just like the dying star,

    that has collapsed.

 

Can you not see?

    Your story is your story

  but the parts connected

    at the right atrium

        are my story, too.

 

I guess I only ever wanted

    to merely exist

        in your space;

      even as much as I

 fervently wished

     you would,

some day

     materialize

            in mine.

 

I was never ashamed

    that I once looked

 for messages written

         in stars

   with one such as you.

 

From behind the nebula

    covering the space

  that once held my heart-

 

I am sorry.

 

 

 

 

 

 



© 2013 Marie Anzalone


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How do we apologize for those who no longer want us in their lives? It is very easy to wonder if the past even ever existed; the sweetness of that past seems somehow a fantasy we held in our minds.

This poem is filled with the pain and longing to have just that last word of apology heard. Even in its brevity, it has some good iconography within the stars and your heart.

My only critique is that the second stanza seems backwards to me. I would personally feel that you are not allowed to exist, not that the other doesn't exist. This may be subjective, though, so I would perhaps chalk it up to a difference in style.

I read. I acknowledge. I hold.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

I respectfully disagree, Lonestar. What recourse does one have to explore their own feelings about a.. read more
Through the Gateway

11 Years Ago

Thanks. I'll believe it when I see it, though. ;)

Like I said...I think it's more a dif.. read more
Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

I just had a thoughtful review of my newest one... the one that ripped my heart out to write. About .. read more



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This is great, well written and flowing in lovely form, like a river. I really like this part:
I guess I only ever wanted
to merely exist
in your space;
even as much as I
fervently wished
you would,
some day
materialize
in mine

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

Thak you, OB. I am glad you stopped by, and glad too that you liked this well enough to leave behind.. read more

I was never ashamed
that I once looked
for messages written
in stars
with one such as you.

i loved this stanza, yeah you've great talent even more than me, you this stuff is damn nice and hope you'd love to be with me when i touch the stars...lol :P
that's great write and tight hug...!!100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

wow, thanks for the kind review, Rahul. Be well- you will be missed on site. I am ashamed to look at.. read more
Rahul

11 Years Ago

lol :)
yeah, i know it's too hard to me to leave this site because in a mean time i'm touched .. read more
I was never ashamed
that I once looked
for messages written
in stars
with one such as you.

My dad had this thing he did that I always find myself doing now. It started with a bible but now I do it with any book or magazine that catches my eye. Sometimes it seems like a sign or maybe just serendepitous (new word) and sometimes it's just jibberish but here it is in a nutshell - i pick up the book and maybe a say a quick prayer or just hold an image or person in my mind and then just randomly open up the book and read the first lines that come to me. The hope is that they will somehow reveal something to me. Of course I can't tell you how many times I did this with the bible and found myself reading about somebody's destruction or falling from grace! At any rate, to actually review your work I have to say I agree with your choices here and have found myself feeling much the same on many occasions. What was that thing you did when you asked me questions about the cube? And I saw the horse eating my flowers! lol This is a good piece obviously taken from a page or pages of your heart. Very nice work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

LOL Augesten Burroughs wrote about that practice- the family he lived with had a formal name for it,.. read more
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This is just beautiful. Plus I love Physics, it's the path I would love to take. So this poem morphs two of my favorite things into one. I love it thank you for writing it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Ms. Crowd. I draw upon a lot of natural and scientific imagery and reference for my work... read more
Alone In A Crowd

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much
I personally don't believe in saying sorry if you don't mean it from heart :)
this poem is filled with lots of emotions..sad yet effective :)
Saying sorry is never simple as it seems...
Lovely write!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

You are so right, Akshat, it is never easy, and was never meant to be, either. Thanks for your kind .. read more
Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

You are welcome dear..check my poems if you get time :)
Take care :)
This is beautiful. Very creative and unique.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

Thank you, soliloquy. I am glad you enjoyed my style in this.
talking to the constellations when yer heavy heart has so much more gravity...another lovely weave of words from u

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

I think the very first God human beings ever saw was in the stars, including our very own sun, whcih.. read more
NEVER write 'i'm sorry'
people might mistake you for meaning it!!! HAI!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

mysterious forces abound, even so
I came and read these words, i was probably so overcome with the stars and the existance and stories that i wandered away without leaving a note

as always, reading your words is like looking in a mirror for me

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily B

11 Years Ago

oh, but i love the heights, up there with the hawk and the rainbow and the clouds, i can breathe on .. read more
Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

I too am a creature more suited for mountains and forests than actual human living, I fear. But I te.. read more
Emily B

11 Years Ago

i thought my life was hard until Brandon came into our lives, i am learning just how blessed we real.. read more
Knowing you and your circumstances, I knew instantly...I believe!...what this was about, though there were moments when I thought of at least two others to which parts of it might have applied. That, to me, is the hallmark of an exquisite piece of writing, that the author can take her personal experiences and heartaches, and so selflessly expose and metamorphose them that others can see themselves and their lives-slash-pains in them, and profit or learn from hers. The honorarium (soon, I think, to become a poem!) "Word Chef" just crossed my mind: One who selects, filets, combines, rejects, marinates, and finally bakes a unique casserole of the soul, where any who will may dine to satiation. Bon Apetit, Chef!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

Ah Mark, I always love it when you grace my page. Thank you for your kind words for my faltering one.. read more
Mark

11 Years Ago

Well, now, that's what I get for thinking, as he for whom I had thought it , 'twarn't him a'tall!
Marie Anzalone

11 Years Ago

keeping you on your toes, Mark :-)
nice to see you here. miss you.

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Marie Anzalone
Marie Anzalone

Xecaracoj, Quetzaltenango, Guatemala



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Bilingual (English and Spanish) poet, essayist, novelist, grant writer, editor, and technical writer working in Central America. "A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to ta.. more..

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