The Fall

I'm falling  I can't stop myself

I'm falling  wheres to go?

I'm left to plunge unto the earth

Where nothing is to go.

Dare I try to stop myself?

At best I won't succeed.

The winds shall wrap around myself 

And take me to my knees.

The memories flow throughout my head

As  blood begins to rush.

The cards of life dealt to my hand

behold a royal flush.

Even the finest must eventually fold

For there will come a new.

A new seed to plant to nourish and grow

Just like I once grew.

"What see you?" may you ask

When I descend throughout the sky.

A single memory that encapsulates 

My life that has passed by.

I'm falling I can't stop myself

With seconds left to brace

I'm falling and I've reached the end

Now I'm left to wake.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

What do you think? Analyze, interpret, and critique and overall thoughts.

Reviews

[Christopher Kneipp]

Good poem. As was previously mentioned there were a couple of lines towards the beginning that were difficult but nothing a minor edit wouldn't fix. Great imagery. (I have had dreams/nightmares like this) Don;t worry too much about it though Poetry is the language of the soul.

[Bree]

Very well written. There were a few lines at the beginning that I wasn't quite sure made sense, but the flow and the rhythm was excellent. I especially liked the last four lines of the poem. Great work. I look forward to reading more of your writing!

- Bree

[Ralphy]

I like your poem, I like the flowing rhymes and over all message although the message sounds as if one is overwhelmed and can't gain control of their life. I like the craftiness of this poem as it spills many thoughts in the readers mind, through the direction of falling...With seconds left to brace, I'm falling and I've reached the end Now I'm left to wake...I like how you tied the ending together.

I feel pain in this poem, and wonder if pain of a darkness sounding the writer. but that not do with the form of the poem...lol bbr nice write

[Flo]

very carefully constructed in my opinion, I really liked how it has a sense of rhyme in it yet, makes it deep with feeling as if your making a speech, nothing really negative about it, very well put ending, overall an enjoyable mind worked poem, good job
-Flo