Falling Stones

 An Eternity Here

There Could be worse

Our actions have reaped these consequences

If this is it it's not so bad

Left to sway among the breeze

We'll talk of everything we've once shared

Memories of the past float in the air

Every detail we remember will be told once more

Down to each second we will recall

And what happens when we are finished with the past?

To the future we look to see what is to come

Since nothing transpires we must invent one

And after that an infinite more

Forever

Author's Note

What do you think? Analyze, interpret, and critique and overall thoughts.

Reviews

[Dollface]

I like this poem- it makes use of that abstract idea of memory. The idea of facing eternity in the breeze of the past is interesting.

[A]

Love this!
"And what happens when we are finished with the past?
To the future we look to see what is to come"
My favorite lines^! Overall this is a great poem! :)

[Kayleen]

this is really good, but i kind of get the feeling its trying to hard.

[Andrew'sWonderland]

Great little poem!! This could probably be interpreted in several different ways, but I believe it expresses our need to move on.. The past can never be erased, but the future holds endless possibilities!!! :)

This could be about a person not sure of where to go next in their life, or this could be a very fine description on the human race. Our past actions can't be erased, so we must move forward.

[Edalene Connell]

I like this. Short and simple, but to your point.

[Aaron Eliad]

this is 90% really good. i think that some of the thoughts don't fully correspond with the rest of the poem, but i have the same problem. other than that, i thoroughly enjoyed it, the lack of punctuation is a nice touch, it gives a different flow rather than just being textbook and a.b.c. my favorite part would have to be the simplicity of the words you used, this way it's not congested or convoluted with complexities that most people would need to keep looking up to understand it. good poem. thanks for sharing with everyone =)

[barricade]

great work...i really liked it...

"To the future we look to see what is to come
Since nothing transpires we must invent one
And after that an infinite more
Forever"

Beautiful lines here...brilliant!
just keep those words flowing....you got great potential!!!

keep it up!

regards
Barricade....

[Lunar Pup]

It was good it reminds me of my earlier style of poetry which I changed to the stanza and rhyming like a week ago. Practice makes perfect. Good poem though.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This was a nice attempt :)
The choice of words at few places was exceptionally brilliant but the poem lacked in the structure..
The structure was not appealing as it should be, so I think so that you should work on that..
But overall, a great piece of writing!