I Don't Mind

No stars can be seen on a cloudy night 
I'll watch them anyway 
Two swings empty 
After you 
Suspended in summer 
Night after night 
We can leave 
The melodies play 
We'll bob our heads 
A black circle 
Nothing's there 
I don't mind 
Something from the past 
Just another story 
I'll take the present 
Let it fall 
We don't mind 
A dash to cover 
I'm soaked 
I don't mind 
Headlights glare onto open pavement 
It's raining and I don't mind 
A house appears 
I'll walk in the rain 
I don't mind 
I'm at your doorstep 
The choice is mine 
I don't mind 
It's the small things 
No good-byes 

Author's Note

What do you think? Analyze, interpret, and critique and overall thoughts.

Reviews

[DaGirlNxtDoor]

wow that was overall it is such an awesome poem! great job keep it up!

[Cupcake]

It was very unique : ] Keep up the good work.

[jessfoundwonder]

i like it. it's kind of chopped thoughts but they all go together nicely. kind of like a slideshow instead of a movie.
it's cool. and whoever says that you disgrace poetry is terribly mistaken. write more, i want to read it.

[Shaunta R. Edwards]

i think it is beautifully written i often have the fear that my writing may not make sense to anyone other than my self... it's nice to know i relate lol

[_////---Elektrik Phanto..]

quite a unique style. i enjoyed it! it gave me a very original emotional feeling. thanks for sharing.

[�Alexa�]

I loved it! Message me when you write anything else. :)

[deeps]

I love it, I think it is super sweet
A very well written write from the heart.

[emmajoy]

This is appears to be a simple poem, brief phrases.. but it has more than that, it speaks a thousand words. You created a small masterpiece in atomsphere and emotion.

The repeated use of 'I don't mind' makes it gently powerful, an intention of thought and feeling.

Thank you so much for sharing.

[Dollface]

I liked this... Hmm... But what would be the black circle? I don't know- something about the rain, and the just the other details sort of gives it this surreal edge. I like it.

[Anthony M Smith Jr]

I really liked your words. This brought me to many memories I had with friends who are no longer here. I too love the rain it feels like a blessing, funny thing is not long ago I was at the farmer's market and this guy told his wife, Damn, its going to piss on us today! LoL