What Do You Do?

What Do You Do?

A Poem by Mir

What do you do when the feelings you have

Are for someone you don’t even know.

Do you tell them about it, or do you leave them alone?

Would they think you’re a creep and tell you to go?

 

How do you share your feelings

When the person isn’t even aware.

Should you try to move on,

Or show them that you care?

 

Is this how love starts?

Having feelings grow for someone you’ve yet to meet?

Do you know right away,

Or do you wait till you’ve fallen a few hundred feet?

© 2012 Mir


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At the end of the second line in the first two stanzas I think there should not be periods but instead a question mark. That is because it is a question/those are questions. Whatever floats your boat though I guess.
I feel like it ends abruptly and leaves you going to far and fast. You can't really stop yet. From two different perspectives:
1) Not a good ending.
2) KEEP IT!!! FEELING LIKE YOUR FALLING OFF THE EDGE OF THE POEM SHOWS THAT YOU HAVE FALLEN A FEW HUNDRED FEET.
I believe you see my point. Well, some people won't see the second POV and will tell you to change it. Listen to the second one. I would listen to the second one because it was more thought out. The person thought long enough for the reason. They want you to keep it that way. You are talented. Don't let different people tell you otherwise. Nicely penned my poetic friend!
Best regards,
Dell

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mir

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review Dell! It was well thought out and much appreciated!
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Phillitup

11 Years Ago

Good for you! I rather like the suspense at the end.
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Posted 11 Years Ago


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Aly
Love this!
Well I just about love everything you write!

You are so talented!
I just can't express how talented you are without writing the same things over and over again.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aly

11 Years Ago

I get insecure about my writing too. I think it's a writer thing ;)
Welcome. Hey thank YOU for.. read more
Mir

11 Years Ago

Oh stooop. Haha thank you!
Aly

11 Years Ago

Welcome! :)

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Added on November 24, 2012
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Tags: love, people, questions, feelings

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