Mirror On The Wall

Mirror on the wall,

Why dont you like me?

Looking at you makes me want to bawl,

'Cuz all I see is ugly.

 

Mirror on the wall,

Why do you hate me?

I dont like your reflection at all.

Why can't I be pretty?

 

Mirror on the wall,

Why can't you love me?

You make my tears turn into waterfalls,

'cuz all I want is to be happy.

 

Mirror on the wall,

I dislike you

I've tried so hard to to get your approval,

But it seems impossible to do!

Reviews

[devon]

I really liked this. :)

It's really easy to relate to. We all get to a point in life where we don't like the person that looks back at us in the mirror. I love the fact that you repeat the first line in every stanza. It makes it almost fairy tale-like, and I really like that!

I did notice a few grammatical errors. For example, 'Cuz should be 'Cause. In the second stanza, on the third line, you forgot a apostrophe in between the 'n' and the 't' in don't. And on the last stanza, second line, you should put a period at the end of "I dislike you".

Other than that, this was amazing! Keep writing, lovely. You have talent. :)

[Mir]

Thanks Dev! That was very helpful!! =]

[devon]

You're welcome! Glad I could help! Can't wait to read more! :D

[Mir]

Ha good! Because I just posted some more! :)

[devon]

I just read the other one, about the girl losing her virginity! It was good :)

[Healing Star]

ONe more thing I forgot to mention. First get quiet standing in nature for a minute or two facing the East. And as you turn to each direction stand straight with your hands open down at your side with the palms open facing just like your face is facing. Now once you feel the energy coming to you from each direction say what is in your heart to each direction. Aboriginal people, native american, Australian, south american, all recognize the four directions and the energies of creation in the four directions. This is truth, undeniable truth, and the universe will open up to you so that you can have a giving and receiving relationship with the universe. And the universe is within your heart. All of our hearts have a sacred space and this space is the same space for all of us, this is how we are connected. We are not separated that is illusion.

[Healing Star]

Miranda, I like this. I see you growing in this.
You don't need approval, this whole battle is going on inside you.
Just smash the mirror, you don't need it, you are beautiful.
It is just Miranda and Miranda, and I am betting on Miranda.
You are aware of the illusion Miranda now, so she will start to fade and the beautiful, sweet and lovely Miranda will start showing up more and more. Pray for the universe, Mother Earth and Father Sky to help you rise above it. Stand out in nature facing the East and say Energy of the East - I welcome you, help me. and Then turn to the South - and say Energy of the South - I am thankful for your warmth, for your peace. and then Turn to the West and say Energy of the West - my end of the day, where day and night meet in a kiss - help me to find myself. and then turn to the North - and say Energy of the North - please help me to walk the path of truth. Then turn to Father Sky and say help me Father, then turn your head down and say Mother - Mother I am here - what can we do together. As you do these just say what comes into your heart. I try to do this ceremony everyday. It helps, I walk away and something beautiful happens every time. These are the energies of creation - and your writing is creation - it will help I guarantee! Peace to your beautiful heart Miranda.

[Miranda Richard]

Great job! I love this, it's very unique and very well written.

[Mir]

Thank you so much!! :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

another good idea..this really needs more work and you have to spell Bawl...meaning to cry...correctly....I love the last two lines they are excellent