I have to live without you

I'm deaf and defeated Blind and beaten Is this always the fight? What will be the end price? All I have is my life Everyday I'm struggling through Somehow doing it without you A piece of me fades everyday Losing myself in every way I just cant fight anymore So I'm laying down and giving up Maybe the knife can end my life I know it's true. I have to live without you...

Reviews

[Amanda J. S.]

This is so sad...
I can really relate to this...

Good job!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I like this since I know how it feels to try to go on with life without someone you truly love. I actually loved a guy for about two years straight. Guys would ask me out but I'd nicely reject them since I wasn't over that one guy. I eventually saw how I started to lose myself over someone that didn't care about losing me. That's what it took for me to get back on my feet and move on. I know there's someone out there made just for you! Nice job. It's relatable, sad, but yet amazing! :D

Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[Pikachu]

This is wonderful, in a dark way I mean. ~w~

It's true, raw, and emtional. c:

Great write dear!

[harry]

thank you ..miss pikachu

[Pikachu]

hah, the name is Attie. (:

[harry]

okay miss attie nice to meet you

[Pi Cee]

You always have to live without somebody. It's whether you make the people who you know will walk away worth more than the ones you know might stay a little bit longer. But that's the whole test in itself.

[harry]

yeh you are right ..... people come in our life to leave

[♥ Lexii Boo ♥]

to often

[Pi Cee]

But they should be the people you deliberately don't want to associate with for exactly that reason. You can't help it all the time, but sometimes you can.

[harry]

yeh !..thats life

[♥ Lexii Boo ♥]

that is very true

[Pi Cee]

^I know. That would be the reason I said it.^

[harry]

=)

[♥ Lexii Boo ♥]

:D

[Myra]

So deep yet also very relatable...nice work!

[harry]

thank you

[Laura Maidah]

The questions you ask here are rudimentary psyche 101. The rhymers don't work in your favor. As you know, it's just my H Opinion. It's suicide your trying to execute, Nice concept. Very written about on here. Your stance offers nothing new though. Nietzsche, for example, is remembered from saying suicide is a consolation prize at night. He later killed himself. POint is he gave us a new spin. Give me another suicide poem ridden with teen angst and I'll weep. I know, you're only 15. You're a talented poet, which is obvious in your word choice. Diction is pretty stellar. Transcendent aural motif, though the meter varies, which is purposed. My advice? Poetry is all about imagery, symbolism, sensory details, and figurative language. Give me a picture. Every line is a consequence of the last. Give me a movie in a vignette, ya dig?

[TawnyBlueStar]

nice :D I like the last two lines
100

[harry]

thank you

[TawnyBlueStar]

you're welcome :D

[Enar]

It even sounds good
100/100

[harry]

thank you

[darkness*star1985]

This touches my heart, im so relating to this write, i have felt these strong emotions like this before. Good write. keep it up

[harry]

thank you miss dark angel star

[Morrigan Nicole]

Emotionally captivating, I like the truth behind it.

[harry]

thank you miss