Give You All

Although  in this world
I have no riches
I know that far beyond this place
A green glory awaits

A stranger I wander
By and by a world asunder
By sadness and with grief
Awaiting that joy

Tall words of disappointment
I am not rich and nor are you
I tell you truly
Wealth knows no love

And yes I was a poor boy
Loss cause to his world 
But I live each day with joy
For tomorrow my not come

So give me your hand
Take me away
I will marry you
And you will not die alone

Take me in your hands love me
I like if tomorrow has no hope to come
Like if we were the only ones
In this pious world

I would live with you
To roam your home
To love you in it
To give you all

Reviews

[A. V. Madison]

You surpass me in the sense of- you can write long poems and keep the energy going. Whereas when I write a piece, I average about three stanzas before the energy in the poem runs out. A very nice piece, and I look forward to seeing what else you can offer. You have a lot of talent, Harry. Don't waste it.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Quite something for a 15 year old! A moving piece that flows well and gets the intended message across well.

A few typos noticed. Just to let you know so they won't distract.
"Loss cause to his world"  - did you mean "lost" and/or "this"

"For tomorrow my not come' - did you mean "may"

"I like if tomorrow has no hope to come" - not sure exactly here...did you mean "like tomorrow has no hope"?

[Lost in Wonderland]

Another very sweet and loving poem:) Well done

[Morrigan Nicole]

A beautiful poem. I can tell you, I relate to this well.

[Perfect Mistake]

This is really sweet yet sad at the same time. Each stanza you written told an even more beautiful story in the poem. Great work :3

[harry]

thank you miss living dead girl ..

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

i really like this it is cute and sweet! great work haha i hope to see more :D and the last stanza was AMAZING!!! this is now one of my favorites great write love it!!!

[harry]

thank you ....

[♥ Lexii Boo ♥]

anytime

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Great poem! The last stanza really sticks in my head. Great write!

[harry]

thank you miss

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Not a problem :)

[Shauna Jacqueline Ander..]

This is cute. There are a few typo's though, like the odd letter missing from a word and misspelling's, nothing major but I would recommend revising.
Overall not a bad piece, got potential.

[harry]

okay I will

[afra]

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is so sweet

[harry]

but some girls don't realize that

[afra]

nawww she will realize that ...........

[harry]

if she realizes now I don't give a F*** cause that crush is now over ...

[afra]

okay harry potter ...lol