Here Without You

They tell me I'm too young  To feel The way I do, They tell me I am blind,  What I'm Feeling can't be true. they say I''m just a child And you are playing games, They say that I am stupid  To grow up and behave. They tell me you're a liar A player and a cheat, They tell me so many things Somethings I can't repeat. They say that I am crazy, Its true I'm losing my mind, I'm floating through the clouds Leaving life behind. Because everything without you Is incomplete and just not real I don't care what they tell me Because they can't change how I Feel. Being here without you Theres just no way I can feel right, So I'll pretend that I was listening Yet stay with you tonight

Author's Note

this came from my heart

Reviews

[Lost in Wonderland]

This was beautiful and had great emotions! Well done(:
God bless

[C.C. Marx]

the best poetry comes from the heart....I guess it speaks loud enough for you to hear and understand :)

[Stephen C Morgan]

Wow this is amazing!! It's so incredibly emotional - I literally felt every single word! Pretty personal stuff though hey!

[under-the-water]

whaaaa u wrote a kick a*s poem ova here. ok now lets be serious - ok i went threw the worst break up of my life this year - and this poem pretty much explains my feelings without him. its been 7 months - I've had like 3 other boyfriends - but sadly enough - i still feel the same about him.
"Being here without you
Theres just no way I can feel right,
So I'll pretend that I was listening
Yet stay with you tonight"
these lines pretty much describe my life - not to be creepy or anything
well anyways awesome poem and keep writing bro

[Secret Lullaby]

LOVED IT! LOVED IT! LOVED IT! this was a great poem and it was a lil sad and a lil sweet(: this is sooo going on my favorites(;

[Calibaster]

alright, it was awsome, but in some places it felt like the rythym just fell flat, like that part where you said," Somethings I can't repeat," take out some, and that part where you said," is incomplete and just not real," just say, just really can't be real, and the part that says," Theres just no way I can feel right," Just say, it could never feel right, sorry, I love rythym, I can't help myself! But it really was great, you don't have to take my suggestions, but before you dismiss them, read the poem out loud, then read it out loud again, with them inserted. Really I don't mean to be rude, It's just what I saw.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh, I really like this because I can totally relate to it! My most recent ex boyfriend I felt like this towards. For awhile, I felt so incomplete and my parents thought I was foolish and too young to know what "love" is anyways. It made me mad because I do know. Love isn't for a certain age, gender, or race. It's for everyone to experience at anytime. I wish more people understood that. Geez, I guess they won't sadly! :( This poem actually reminds me of the song "Here Without You" by: 3 Doors Down. A great song related to an excellent poem! :)

Ashley Rivers-- Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Jon Settle]

This is really heart felt :) officially made my day.

[Amanda]

This is really nice, great job. My friend Mike feels this way about his girlfriend and their relationship. Once again, good write. :)