Example

i don't like the self i was tonight. 

a vivid girl, staring into strangers eyes, 

that was me. 

all i wanted was a distraction,

but tonight 

i feel the hole inside me has widened 

and let in all kinds of disbelief.

disbelief in myself and my ability 

to be whole.

to be completely on my own.

knowing you has turned me strange, lonely and wanting.

i don't like myself anymore.

Reviews

[Rossen]

Clear clean writing, moved..

[Nobody.]

wow. great poem. truly enjoyed.
my favorite bit: "knowing you has turned me strange"
nicely put!
cheers!
R.G.

[Alicante lullaby]

wow...i love emotions flowing through this one..

[smalltownsympathies]

Wow. Incredible. I have no critique, and refuse to coments on people's writings if there's no hope. You, my dear, have serious talent, and I'm sure you've realized that. I'm truly honored to have read that. That sounds weird coming out of the typing hands of a 16-year old girl i'm sure, but fantastic nontheless. I'm in awe. :)