A Monologue For the Broken Heart

The title says it all.

Put none of thy faith in me,

For I will disappoint and

Squander it selfishly as a

Human must. Allow me to

Make you no promise, as

I will most certainly destroy

It, no matter how I try.

It would be by my hand

That you reached your

Demise, unbeknownst to

Either of us two, of course.

Alas, I have once kissed thy

Lips and ere, I have murdered

Thee; I have unwittingly signed

The Devil's contract and in

Giving you up in my place, I

Have doubly condemned myself.

Be wary, all you that trust in

Me- I am a selfish creature, by

Whom courtesy and mercy are

Not known. Tread lightly, as the

World is much quieter now, though

The wreckage still remains.

If thou canst recall all of these

Things I once promised to thee,

Thou shalt find that all these are

But falsities, though that was never

My intent. I tried for your sake and mine,
To let you slip away easily, perhaps even

Unnoticed... Such separations are complex

And I still find myself unable to fathom
This empty part of myself that you used

To fill . I cannot help but allow

Myself to contemplate the depth

Of this damnable abyss that continues
To feed on me; this gaping hole that may

Never be filled again. But is it worth such

A misery that we found in eachother?

The constant wars and verbal murders

Were just too much to bear... Yes, I

Love thee, and have loved thee, and

Will always love thee... I just cannot

Bring myself to remain in such a place

That I found myself in before. I would

Offer my apologies to thee, in exchange

For a silent departure, but that would

Mean that these aforementioned apologies

Would have to exist. I am not sorry

For the choices I have made. I will

Always remember you, and you will always

Be a part of me. If it is meant to be,
Then it shall find its way. But as for now,

There is nothing that shall remain

Between us, save for my unwavering love

For you, and this knife in my

     heart.

Reviews

[Chris Zahar]

The interplay of innocence and guilt in this piece is absolutely brilliant. Despite the fact that this is a monolouge there almost seems to be two personalities here. The most obvious is the first one, the selfish one who will just hurt the one it loves, but struggling to be heard and not be pushed aside is the innocent one, the one that unwittingly signed the Devil's contract, yet, despite that, will always remember its loved one. It's almost as if this character is evil, not by choice, but because the cruelty of reality and miserable existence has beaten it down into being such, and maybe, underneath it all, there is still an angel yearning to break free.

Okay, now for the criticism part. This poem is far to long to be written as one big piece. Perhaps on paper it wouldn't be so bad, but on the computer, it just tires the eyes to read such a long piece. Instead, I would reccommend breaking it up into stanzas of, say, eight or nine lines, than putting a double space between each stanza. It will create the illusion that the poem is shorter than it really is, and make it less tiring to read.

Then again, that's a very minor complaint, and if you choose to keep your work the way it is, that's no big deal. Love your work.

[Arthur Henn]

We are all here for you, remember that.
Broken hearts can be repaired. Take your time.

Art

[Rain]

I love this. For me, it also speaks. A long ago,passionate, volatile love. This piece talks about the lingering effects. Good write. Rain..