Thanks for thy sorry...

Misty clouds dovetail alluringly

with the discarded sleepy boulevard;

Thoughts mesmerized by the breathe-less path

I came for a last walk;

snooping for the moon, that alone

is beautiful with the scars,

through the fissures of our maple tree

I lay ruinously down on the bed of fresh grass;

Days we spent together in the bliss of love

never dies down as a grandma’s bed-time tale;

tears, rolling on my cheeks only to relax

on my lips, gives up the fight...

my smile resided in a fool’s paradise,

consciously cloaked in a child’s innocence;

your lap my second-heaven, first being your hug,

refuses to fulfill my deathbed plea…

In your dimples, too seductive to handle,

I took a life-time nap;

holding your hands I sermonized

Romeo and Juliet to the world..

no less time you resuscitated me

with your celestial kisses under this tree,

we swapped our souls to the hum of the

leaves rustling in the breeze, a perfect lover’s song…

not many times we fought out of malice,

never a time l let tears gushing down your buddy-eyes,

yet a thick plume of glitches spread before us

blindfolding the corridor to eternity;

wild scuffles, an entr'acte ensconced

between the idyllic intimacies,

suffocated the ethereal bond to death..

“Sorry”, you said fantasizing the ephemera-love,

gifting me the footsteps of ephemeral demise...

"Thanks for thy sorry", I whisper before winding myself up....

Author's Note

this poem depicts the pain of a guy who was abandoned by her girlfriend due to some misunderstandings and is on the verge of losing himself....

Reviews

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

It's deep and sad, but it's still beautiful. I enjoyed reading very much. Keep at the good work!

[cynthiabuhainbaello]

Beautiful and profound, deeply moving poem.

[darkness*star1985]

story of my live right now, but vise versa, i am the girl who couldn't speak to her guy for a long time, because of things that were taking place, he will never understand and i don't think he wasn'ts to. This digs deep with me. excellent writing.

[Jordan Easley]

I liked the vocabulary you used. There were a lot if words that really fit in this poem. It was nice

[Maan]

thanks for the note any ways which was quite obvious too by having a good read. :) The idea is pretty old but the way you have described it is wonderful, the words you have used to describe the very understandable feelings are good and the relations of them with unseen surroundings and thoughts are beautiful. The end of this poem is another beginning for him. :) It is easy to describe that it was sad but I guess it was something more than that. Well the over all work is just fantastic, I liked it all. Thanks for sharing and KEEP writing.

[Fréyjä Helv..]

So deep, so sad, so beautiful... I could just feel the emotion the character is feeling... It's excruciating sorrow, deep longing... Beautiful poem

[White_lily]

A very beautiful poem :)

[Kristallo]

no less time you resuscitated me
with your celestial kisses under this tree,
we swapped our souls to the hum of the
leaves rustling in the breeze, a perfect lover’s song…

I love that, so poignant and sweet. There is melancholia ringing like lonesome bells throughout each harmonic stanza. Thought the last line was a perfect ending to the winsome story of lover's expression. Very nice poem. :)

[Johnmac08]

The poem doesn't flow as beautifully as your last work. Sometimes less is more :)

[Lizbeth]

Oh dear, this poem was so poignant and so sad, about a break-up that somehow one had the feeling the author never thought it would happen. It is so beautifully crafted, the choice of words are really moving. Loved the lines:
"with the discarded sleepy boulevard;" and
"my smile resided in a fool’s paradise,"
And in the author's note I think that should be "his girlfriend."
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem ...

[Harishvarmaa]

thanks lizbeth:)