Imagine your very reality crumbling before you, with no way to stop it
Imagine waking up one day, and getting told that everything
you know to be real is fake. Would it hurt? Would you be scared? How would you feel?
It is a terrifying think of being all alone. Imagine it, though, everything you
deemed real is gone from your very grasp in an instant. All the feelings you
felt, all the people you knew, all the memories you made, all built in a
fantasy that didn’t exist, and that fantasy is now crumbling and falling apart
around. Would you desperately, hopelessly, try to fix it. Or, would you start
anew. Forget everything, start over in what you believe to be the “new world”. What
would you do? Your parents, friends, and even your enemies are gone. All alone
in a world unknown.
Imagine reality crumbling before you, with no way to stop it.
Imagine waking up one day and getting told that everything you know to be real is fake. Would it hurt? Would you be scared? How would you feel? (It is a terrifying think of being all alone.) Not sure what you're saying in this sentence.
Imagine it though, everything you deemed real is gone from your very grasp in an instant. All the feelings you felt, all the people you knew, all the memories you made, all (are) a fantasy that didn’t exist, and that fantasy is now crumbling and falling apart around (you). Would you desperately, hopelessly, try to fix it(?) Or, would you start anew(?) (Would you) forget everything, (starting) over in what you believe to be the “new world(?") What would you do? Your parents, friends, and even your enemies are gone. (You would be) all alone in a world unknown.
This story and its premise sounds like the result of watching a Twilight Zone episode called 'Where is everybody.' (One of my favorite shows by the way). The first sentence may need more clarification. "everything you know to be real is fake." Does that mean my shoes, my TV, my hands are all fake? Who is telling me? I can only assume I'm in a hospital? Also, there seem to be a lot of questions with no answers which may tire the reader out. You may want to revise with these thoughts in mind.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thanks! a lot of good points there, i will look it over again with all those in mind and try a secon.. read morethanks! a lot of good points there, i will look it over again with all those in mind and try a second draft, thanks again!
Wow, I've actually thought about this often... I did a bunch of Salvia and it took me in to this other world where all my life was a dream, none of it was real... and I just woke up. Well great write, makes you think...
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
sounds exciting, it is interesting to think about though.
Imagine reality crumbling before you, with no way to stop it.
Imagine waking up one day and getting told that everything you know to be real is fake. Would it hurt? Would you be scared? How would you feel? (It is a terrifying think of being all alone.) Not sure what you're saying in this sentence.
Imagine it though, everything you deemed real is gone from your very grasp in an instant. All the feelings you felt, all the people you knew, all the memories you made, all (are) a fantasy that didn’t exist, and that fantasy is now crumbling and falling apart around (you). Would you desperately, hopelessly, try to fix it(?) Or, would you start anew(?) (Would you) forget everything, (starting) over in what you believe to be the “new world(?") What would you do? Your parents, friends, and even your enemies are gone. (You would be) all alone in a world unknown.
This story and its premise sounds like the result of watching a Twilight Zone episode called 'Where is everybody.' (One of my favorite shows by the way). The first sentence may need more clarification. "everything you know to be real is fake." Does that mean my shoes, my TV, my hands are all fake? Who is telling me? I can only assume I'm in a hospital? Also, there seem to be a lot of questions with no answers which may tire the reader out. You may want to revise with these thoughts in mind.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thanks! a lot of good points there, i will look it over again with all those in mind and try a secon.. read morethanks! a lot of good points there, i will look it over again with all those in mind and try a second draft, thanks again!
Wow, this really got me to think.. I'm not sure what i would do if this happened to me. Very powerful story! 100/100 :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
thanks! scary to think that that really could happen, fairly unlikely... but it could. I tend to hav.. read morethanks! scary to think that that really could happen, fairly unlikely... but it could. I tend to have thoughts like this a lot through the day so it's always interesting!