A Falling Empire Under A Weakening Foundation

With time thus age mind and body sometimes collapses like the fall of the roman empire. While fires and kindled desires loose value in small quantities possibly sealing one’s own fate.

So let us rationalize the notions of daily life’s living. There’s a good, wholesome, healthy sense of living life as well as a ugly sense in life’s living.

Our cause and effect in life can be set in a casing of amber and immortality vaguely being remembered or forever remembered in a high respect.

Those ignorant to the fact of damage being brought upon them or ones character can simply in clear terms rock the strong foundation beneath them and with no actions taken one’s foundation and empire will surely collapse.

Author's Note

Not much to this just a bunch of rambled words haha tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Words of wisdom indeed on the fall of the Roman and any empire. All empires are based on strong visions of which translates to principles of laws and morality . It is enhanced by the contributions of science and technology and above all its architectures and art forms. You must have all those elements in place with the support of your people and with giving freedoms to achieve greatness and success. For they are eventually will make the empire great too. Power in my opinion comes from God and our strong convictions and balanced morality but if any or nation abuses its morality then it will fall from within. Nothing falls but from within then comes the fall from without. Adam disobeyed God ( I blame him ) more than Eve from within his own will then came the exile from heaven. Every action has to have an equal and opposite reaction . It is a law God put in nature and within ourselves. The moral law God revealed in all Holly books are placed in the universe and nature along with the physical ones and when we violate them we will get the reaction in this life and the hereafter. People will tell you otherwise but they know in the bottom of their hearts the real truth.
Another of your wonderful writes dear poet...:)

[kelvin]

Yes indeed I agree totally very very good and true words you say here and yes we mustn't put all the blame on eve for Adam knew what his creator told him he had his own mind to think so he broke the rules and suffered the consequences as even in today if laws are broken man's law. Having a strong sense of morality and a good relationship with god is some of the biggest fuels of strength in our daily lives and all the positives in life and daily living friends and family yes can add strength and high standards to making great peaks to a empire but in time the greatest empire will fall without god on its side for nothing is bigger then the one and only. thank you again for that very truthful and kind piece of words you laid out here such.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. My pleasure...:)

[TLK]

I think this could become a very tight prose poem if you wind it all around a central image / metaphor. It has a wonderful academic style, with the idea that there is an echoing of history in the rise and fall of an individual.

The strongest image I got from this piece was the 'casing of amber' -- I think you could make more of this and turn it into a cohesive piece that is no longer, in your words, "a bunch of rambled words".

I hope I've said something useful that you can use for improvement.

[kelvin]

Well everyone is entitled to their opinion and I thank you for yours here good day.

[AYVID N]

As truly...as strength fails and passions wane, comes the realization that it's now or never to set things right and reinforce the foundations, before the shake-out begins!

A powerful and deep-meaning write-up. Thanks!

[kelvin]

Thank you for your thoughts here

[AYVID N]

You are welcome Kelvin! Very thought-provoking it was!

[Marie]

All empires eventually fall, for it is the nature of empires to fall. Our only hope is that each empires is better and stronger than the last.

[kelvin]

thank you for your thoughts here Miss Marie I do appreciate it very much.