Treasure Hunt

Digging up the past
Beeps mark the spot
Treasure find

Author's Note

This is my very first attempt on this type read so bare with me if its bad tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Everett DeValle]

Its called a Senryu poem, Kelvin...and its not bad...every writer goes through growing pains when attempting a new style.

I guess, you have metal detector to look for lost treasures. ;)

[kelvin]

Yes thank you for your input here and i agree with you I appreciate it.

[Everett DeValle]

You're welcome, Kelvin.

[Marie]

It's good, but it isn't a haiku, if that's what you were gong for.
I've used a metal detector before, and I understand all about the "beeps"...

[kelvin]

well thank you very much I would like try to write some haiku I think it mostly consist of nature and syllable count and such I think right or I could be wrong

[Marie]

A haiku donsists of a syllable count of 5-7-5:
Digging up the past
Beeps lead us to the spot where
Treasure is buried

[kelvin]

yeah i get it

[Sami Khalil]

Another brilliant write , Kelvin...
Some people find treasure in their past that they keep as heirlooms and some find trash or bad memories that the like to get rid off...

[kelvin]

Yes exactly we all have this treasure thank you for you always wise thoughts here.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Frieda P]

Ha I see this all the time at the beach, usually old guys though, you're too young but nice one! ;-)

[kelvin]

Hahaha nope never to young to hunt for any type treasure if this is what we like, where if its in our minds or in the ground thank you for your thoughts here.

[AYVID N]

Treasures....Memories...
Beeps mark the spot - Boy! That's clever Kelvin!

[kelvin]

Thank you very much for your thoughts