Love and Dust

Nothing lasts, you said, gently tying,
The laces of your fashionable jogging shoes,
With a glistening in your eyes,
That put our love in the morgue,
As if love was a race just to win a medal,
My mouth was filled with the dust of your words,
Like a modern prep student, I nodded,
The April sky laughed,
The blossoming flower's fragrance screamed,
In the most beautiful municipal park of city
Come, take some rest,
My bed ' s arm welcomed,
The puzzled street lamp covered with
Chase of moth ' s love,
Laughing on the post modern notions
Your words are true perhaps,
About the finiteness of all things,
Even of love, as you said,
Eternal is just, an ancient word,
But my heart shouted, you know,
One thing is there, that still last forever,
And I changed myself into dust,
To make my love everlasting.

Reviews

[Prabha Salimath]

Eternal is just, an ancient word,
But my heart shouted, you know,
One thing is there, that still last
forever,
And I changed myself into dust,
To make my love everlasting.

these lines are really beautiful Hardeep. To make your love eternal taking the form of dust is firstlt everseen nice job.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much prabha

[Matching Socks]

Wonderful job expressing these emotions.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks Ana

[Arshia]

Lovely poem hardeep! Beautifully expresses the feelings :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot Arshiya

[Emmy Cannon]

Very well written I really enjoyed it!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks Emmy

[KeithKVH]

With a glitter in eyes
-With a glitter in your eyes

One thing is there, that still last forever
-One thing is there that still lasts forever

There are also a couple parts I'm a bit confused by the wording of.

And put our love to morgue,

-I'm assuming you mean put it to death or put it to rest? I'm not sure if morgue is ever used as a literal term for those, but I've never heard it used other than to describe the place where you put dead bodies.

The puzzled street lamp covered with
Chase of moth ' s love

-The moth is in love with and chasing the street lamp right? Saying it's "covered in Chase of moth's love" makes it somewhat unclear. Following the flow of it makes it sound weird and I don't know if you meant it's covered in love or chased by love.

The concept is good. Love and eternity are deep topics, lord knows I struggled with a bit of them today getting lost in deep thought knowing my dog was getting put to sleep. Nothing really seems to last forever, and I guess our only hope is that that's even true for death.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks for the review

[jennifer little]

nice work i enjoyed this poem it was nicely worded and nicely said keep up the good work

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot jens books

[Dipanjan Dutta]

An absolutely brilliant piece of writing. Love could really be made with every entity of this world. It has a beautiful romanticism yet not the cliche narration of love of a boy and a girl. I just loved it. Great!!!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks so much dipanjan

[George Peck]

What a great poem. You can feel everything in this poem. What a great job thank you for showing me.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks george for your kind words

[Mayank]

feelings are very much deep, loved the line of street lamp chased by moths. There's feeling of slowing down and lay down with your love on the flower's bed. The lines are very progressive.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much mayank

[Avinash]

Awesome work Hardeep. The modern dictionary of love has only one place - Trash Can. For most of people men and women alike the word love is just a matter of convinience but the fact is all about facing hardship and taking pain for the ones you love and the person who disagree with that should have no place in your life. I am a big fan of this type of emotive prose from you. Because this way you give a big piece of you through writing.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much avinash for support and praise :)