Value

The depression

Of blank sorrows, in a little shop,
Can you believe, it is only here,
My wish to exist, went to cease,
Doctor sharma's advice, Dosage of,
Alprex and sensible twenty five,
Now a compatible associate,
And substitute for life,
Little less subsaline eyes bargained,
For a coin which was not too far,
When spit fire tongue told to be shopkeeper,
I smiled with a shindy on the face,
Which was not so habitual of the things it did,
And used the pencil to put prices,
Instead of working on canvas, once
Now made them only papers, for
Rupees Ten per kilogram, little more
Price than I have ever expected of vitality.

Reviews

[KeithKVH]

Well I can't really say a lot on it, I'm afraid I'm a bit confused. I know there are poems that don't rhyme, I get the feeling there is some pattern or story to it, but there's just something I don't understand I guess. There are also a couple terms I've never even seen (Alprex and shindy) that I assume might be slang. I hate to be a pain, but I might need an explanation to give my thoughts.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thañks for the read and review

[Wandervogel]

good piece..keep sharing dear.......

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot

[jennifer little]

i liked the flow of this poem it was worded great and i enjoyed reading it keep up the good work and keep on writing

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much

[Baby Ricochet]

I think you could buy a Gremlin in that place

[George Peck]

This was great I loved this poem.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou george

[Harmony]

Amazing presentation of a common enough occurance in the modern world, the commercialization of all commodities, even things that are priceless. Very inspiring poem. Keep writing!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much harmony

[Avinash]

it is better to write than to take medicine. Medicines make you dependent on them.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou avinash for your kind words

[ayesha gupta]

a little confusing. i would like a short comment after my review explaining the poem...as i dont want to ignore what i didnt understood, rather i be happy to get it explained. no offense. :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Ayesha, its not to difficult to understand, even if u have some confusion I will explain you in a msg

[ayesha gupta]

ok. thanks. :-)

[Malister Mikey]

I read rupee's and immediately my brain went to Zelda, though I remembered that it is a currency in India and felt pretty stupid. This poem is very good and I am happy to of read it keep writing it is a much better cure for the darkness of depression than any pill as a person who's seen Hell I know.

Sincerely, Malister Mikey

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot malister mikey

[amrit]

haven`t read such a real life based poetry in a while , really a well thought poem .subject is nicely handled.
thanks for sharing .

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks Amrit for reading and reviewing :)