Existence

Saga, of a weary existence, carry on,
With no more agonies or anguish to decipher,
Frustrations are less now, moving only,
To reach a state of equilibrium,
Words are accomplishing journey,
Randomly, thoughtlessly, but gently,
Ears are aware of every humming,
Only spirits are out of spirits,
It can press, though can not express,
Any more moves? Can any?
Even sun is reluctant to continue more,
As another sick day is towards its end.

Reviews

[Prabha Salimath]

" To reach a state of equilibrium,
Words are accomplishing journey,
Randomly, thoughtlessly, but gently,
Ears are aware of every humming,
Only spirits are out of spirits, "
These lines are really touch the reader Hardeep. Existence means a lot which I want in present a lot, I neither try in past or future very less.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot Prabha for a nice review

[Pushkar Prabhat]

living and existing and the difference!
lovely poem!
i liked it!
:)
the famous 'can you?' really doesn't seems to be living. maybe if we knew the purpose of it's existence, it might come alive! [see i got carried away so, plz ignore]

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks Pushkar for a deep analysis

[Angad Waraich]

Well its different!
And yeah i like it.
Though is the" can any?" Actuall"y supposed to be" can anyone?" ?

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot Angad

[Wandervogel]

nice one dear...keep sharing more....

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thank you sir :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thank you sir :)

[Matching Socks]

This has the feeling of loneliness and depression, or maybe sadness.
The feeling of wondering why we are here and how can we carry on, and is it all worth it.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks ana

[Avinash]

I do feel that it was written when you were not feeling quite well. But it did make you see the light of wisdom in the end.

[hardeep sabharwal]

You are very right avinash,
Thanks :)

[Troy Henson]

I do like this....makes me think....what are we here for? Is our existence misconstrued and what do we live for.

Though provoking piece.

Troy

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot troy

[Sindu]

Words are accomplishing journey,
Randomly, thoughtlessly, but gently,
Ears are aware of every humming,
Only spirits are out of spirits,
It can press, though can not express,

Few lines executing great veracity!
One of those which makes one think. Funny how life makes uncommon and unwanted twists to berate our fight to make something out of it. Amazing write!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks sindu for a nice review

[Rene Salinas]

To try o feel, touch, and know what is permanently intangebile. What a great impulse Hardeep, yet at times that's all we can do jus try, it is intangible for a reason but I agree with you one shouldn't stop trying. Enthusiasm and desire for living are directly related to that search. I have commented on this before Hardeep but I think you still struggle to find the words that would allow you to express exactly what you mean. I still feel the "getting lost in tanslation" factor.

Great feeling though.

Thankyou

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot Rene

[George Peck]

I b love it another great poem from a great writer.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks george for liking