After My Death

Wish for a life death

When I die
Donate Few vulnerable organs
To those, who can use them
of rest of me, creamate a part
And throw ashes half at Kiratpur
Where my ancestors rests
And spread the other half
Over a mountain all over the valley
Bury the other part somewhere
in the cold north
May be in this way
I can be able to live
In one form and
Obtain peace in the other ...

Reviews

[Avinash]

Beautiful wish for post death scenario but what about life? We are here to play our roles and play it good. It is too early for you to fantasize your death. You do that only when you lose all your dreams for life. Sorry to be so direct. But I do feel this poem is born out of self pity and a beautiful life like yours should rather be thinking about life and keep on fantasizing about it. That is why god sent you here.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks Avinash
You are write as u always are that god has given us this life to live in a vital way and we are here to fulfill our dreams and aspirations

I want to add if you see in this poem there is a wish to live after life and longing for peace which id sometimes a distant dream in this modern life

[Avinash]

Never give up :) And I wish you best. Yes the pain also helps us in appreciating life..

[Briana O'Connor]

The desire in this piece is one that leaves the reader thinking. The way you expressed this was beautiful and left a sense of parting peace. Well penned

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much for reading and reviewing so nicely

[Ashira Macy]

Wow, for such a short piece this was incredibly profound. Really interesting take on life an death. Brilliant work!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot Ashira

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the old ways. I'm 1/2 Ojibwa. I would like to be burned at death and tossed into Lake Superior. Here in the USA. Death is not understood even those, all of us will know death one day. I like the ritual and wish in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mayank]

good one... and very good idea to donate organs.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks mayank

[Marie]

That is a great idea, even though you will not actually be with your body, but live and attain peace in another fashion.

[hardeep sabharwal]

thanks a lot marie

[Sami Khalil]

May your wishes be fulfilled. Beautifully penned dear...:).................

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[Baby Ricochet]

After my death I won't be here so whatever happens, happens.

[hardeep sabharwal]

:D your view is practical, but still wishes are wishes :) thanks dear

[AprilRN1210]

Planning for the future and the afterlife is one thing, but obtaining that spiritual peace and living for today is another... As a nurse, I can say the addition of organ donation is a beautiful gesture and very meaningful to those who need... the flow of this piece is very pleasant, and is definitely thought-provoking.. would love to see more emotion and passion sprinkled in, that is what life is all about isn't it.. overall nice write...

[hardeep sabharwal]

AprilRn your reviews are more than just reviews, thanks for support friend :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

AprilRn your reviews are more than just reviews, thanks for support friend :)

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome... it is my pleasure... :)

[George Peck]

what a wonderful thought for ones death. great poem.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks dear friend a lot

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks dear friend a lot

[Deepwater]

spread far and wide, keep writing and smile

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot deepwater :)