HIV POSITIVE

Feelings of a young man suffering from HIV

How can I forget the color of that pink shirt,
And smile of a translucent face,
In the young darkness of evening,
That fifteen minutes touch, or may be,
Any other of that kind,
That turned me positive, from Negative,
A long time passed in understanding,
It is too negative to be positive,
And suddenly my whole presence become dubious
All eyes now look differently,
To my virtues and vices,
Yes I am different now,
Perhaps better than the time
When my identity was not so unreal
Knowing better what to do and how
To alter things and cross obstacles
Than why not let me live positively,
Even after being tested positive

Reviews

[Frank]

You have skill and presented the the poem well, well written on a difficult and unpopular theme. Perhaps a reference to what lead the person into the penalty of this disease, not all victims are sinners, some are completely innocent. Maybe a stronger emotion o the social stigma might be appropriate.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot dear friend

[MomzillaNC]

This was a deeply sad and heartfelt write. That it's still an issue at all is appalling.

There a few places of awkwardness in your lines, where the meter is lost.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot for your precious review

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[R Smith]

great write on the problems facing HIV sufferers the world over, points well made Hardeep, a message to be learnt here, good job :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks Richard

[Avinash]

It is a brilliant piece of writing. I would invite you to a short story which I wrote on similar topic.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot, definitely I would like to read the story

Adding for this poem I have won alfaaz s best poetry competition :)

[Avinash]

Congratulations :)

[Baby Ricochet]

At least it isn't a death sentence now. If you can get the drugs that is.

[hardeep sabharwal]

Actually it is about the behavior of people in general about HIV patients, people always look them and their character In a different view

[hardeep sabharwal]

Actually it is about the behavior of people in general about HIV patients, people always look them and their character In a different view