Spot

This is a poem that i wrote very late at night, half asleep.

Seven years have passed;
Seven years have gone,
Since I lived back in town
with my good friend named Sean.

He slept, and he ran,
Chewing his shoes;
Crazy he was,
Even left me his poos.

One day in disgust
I banged on his door
Said, "Stop leaving me poo,
You sick little w***e!"

The next day I showed the doctor his mess
"Bad news I'm afraid, Sean has IBS."

I was sad for a moment,
But then I decided
That he should be dead
Then I was excited.

It's been seven years
I still miss him a little
'Till I remember his feces
And all of his spittle.

Reviews

[Steven Silvey]

Now that I'm in the correct mind-frame, I will leave you one of my horrid reviews.

Willy. When I stumbled over to the computer, and I saw that you sent me something that you wrote, I ran into the living room to grab Luke, stomping my toe as I went. Now for the review.

One day in disgust
I banged on his door
Said, "Stop leaving me poo,
You sick little w***e!"

The next day I showed the doctor his mess
"Bad news I'm afraid, Sean has IBS."

I, in all seriousness, fell out of my chair when I crossed this. It was just so darn amazing. I for some reason wasn't expecting this level of...Wow. It's incredible, and being the person that I am, I'm sending you a similar poem. I agree that Sean may have been a better name for the poem, but I think that spot is great as well, because the dog left spots as he went.

Man, keep up the good work. It's going into favorites.

[G. K. Bostic]

Funny! Sick humor....love it! ;)

[Conrad Wrobel]

WHAT?!?!? Oh wow, that is hilarious. I thought it was sad, then it was about poo, which I thought was a little silly and odd of a choice. But the 'then i was excited' hit me and i think i peed a little. Very amusing, yet quite touching. I loved it!

[Valentine]

I have 4 outside dogs in a great big kennel allowed to run on our acres two or three times a week..I would miss any of them if they were gone..even the poo and spittle..Valentine

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a sad tale about a sad little tail. Told in such a humorous way that I laughed in spite of myself
great job.
Debby

[Zeva]

The rhyming occasionally felt forced, to me. But it was an interesting poem, even though I can't decide whether to laugh or be sad. If anything, the closing lines made me chuckle. =]

[Tee-o]

Awe, this funny and sad. You must miss really him, I mean you sat down and wrote a poem about him. Ok wait...the title is Spot? hmm? Well then, I guess you're just relieved. lol.

[Michael Carr]

jubd id sad, humorous and really tender piece, lots of emotions flying through/. why is spot the name of the poem? anyways, a really good piece, if a little forced rhyme at times.

[Kevin Connolly]

That's funny stuff, Willy. Especially the last verse:

It's been seven years
I still miss him a little
'Till I remember his feces
And all of his spittle.

Why is it called Spot, and not Sean?
Great stuff.

[Luke Brooks]

First a disclaimer...
I am in no state of mind to review this.

Second the review...

"One day in disguest
I banged on his door
Said, "Stop leaving me poo,
You sick little w***e!"

Willy P, I just wanna be the first JCAer to thank you for posting this.
Amaing.
Hilarious from top to bottom.
If you mature as much as me and Steven have from our first poem until now you will offically be the best writer from JCA on here.
Great job with this.

I enjoyed it.